rate_review Reviews

hi I just wanted to tell you that I am really enjoying the story. I'm having fun with it and I wanted to tell you that if you needed a second beta I would be happy to help. That's up to you thought.

I would like to see more of this one please, I am curious as to where you will take it. I would also like to see a confrontation between harry's new master and the old ronchy one.

So...the dreamy match meets each other, the only problem is...how is their first time? What will happen to Harry's previous master? When will Draco give that collar to Harry? Personally I want a very 'detailed' story and development before that happen...

I'm thoroughly enjoying this story. Yes, you do have a few grammer problems. The one I see the most is a problem with tenses/cases. i.e. "Are the guy still after you" reads more easily as "Is the guy still after you" or "Are they still after you", it's a case of singular versus plural. If you did sort of ignore English class in school, I think you're doing pretty good keeping them straight most of the time.

I look forward to your next update.

well, I completely understand how annoying it is when people only feel the need to comment on grammer and spelling, I hate it to, and I'm not usually one to point those out. I find this story interesting, never have I read something like this, it's orginal. You should keep it up. And I'm not picky about updates, as long as the story is not abandoned, then update when you please, I have trouble keeping an update scedual, but I try. Good job and keep up the good work!
Chrissy

Oh, i love your story! I think you are very talented, so don't let these things like grammar get in your way! Your Draco is so sexy!! I can't help but start imagining how he'll act towards this jerk that is harry's last master. Aiiii, please update as soon as you can, ok? Your fic is one of the interesting ones nowadays. You know? that one that makes us all happy just to see that is updated? Hugs!

I didn't read your fic before today so I don't know how often you update and I won't complain....at the moment.
As Italian myself and wanting to write a fic but being to scared of just writing too bad in English I can understand your feelings (I'm sure even this review is full of mistakes)!
But allow me to humbly point out 2 things at least:
1- the return sentence which was "they are gone" in the second chapter, becomes "is no more" (or something like that) in the forth
2- Since I'm at it, if you use "they are" as in plural, then you should put a "s" at the end of "Death Eater" as in "Death Eaters"
Don't be down because people point out that you do mistakes! God knows how even English-speakers can do very annoying and repeated grammar mistakes (such as when they use "your" instead of "you're"). But I think that people didn't mean to flame, just to suggest you that maybe you should have a beta, that's it! (I don't know really, I haven't read their reviews). Even English-speakers writers often take one, because no matter how many times you read it there's always something you miss even in your own language.

-teacher's mode off-

I wanna lot of sex!!!!
Now that the details have been taken care of, they'll get to the H-stuff, won't they???

UPDATE!! SOON! ^_^

Take your time updating. It

Wonderful chapter! Can't wait for chapter 5!