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January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
you are very skilled at writing lemons. so far this fic has been a lemon feast. i think you could give lessons in writing lemons. the soft nature of Severus is almost completely out of character, that's OK if you put an OC warning on it. there are other writers that do a very snaky dark Severus but have trouble with writing him into the bedroom you could give them a few lessons.
if you wanted to add a little substance a few paragraphs in the beginning that describes Hermione and the reasons Snape is concerned for her. and one chapter between the first private meeting and the valentines meeting, wold go a long way in beefing up this fic. i had fun reading this, and i hope this revue is taken positively
if you wanted to add a little substance a few paragraphs in the beginning that describes Hermione and the reasons Snape is concerned for her. and one chapter between the first private meeting and the valentines meeting, wold go a long way in beefing up this fic. i had fun reading this, and i hope this revue is taken positively
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January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OOC
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have to say, this is brill. Please continue. I love the fact that Severus is kind to her, but what are his reasons for being a bastard to Harry and Ron? Please update soon!!
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hmm, rather naughty isn't she for a virgin? Where's the shy timid Hermione that was in the first chapter?
I liked it, and can't wait to see where this is going.
I liked it, and can't wait to see where this is going.
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh the little Lolita!She seduced him beautifully.
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great lemons