rate_review Reviews

dang that was HOT

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

no offense, but you need a beta. Correct formatting will make the story much more readable. The story shows some promise, especially the first half. Also, Draco really needs to generously lube himself--either with his or her juices are artificially--before going into Hermione's butt--he'd never been able to thrust up forcefully otherwise. And it takes a while for the girl to adjust and get comfortable.

Your story contains a lot of spelling errors. Can I suggest a Beta?
I think then the comments will get better. Don't be disappointed, keep it up!

DJ