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August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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June 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hey are you going to continue this or should i just delete it from my list??
e-mail me with your answer at kaoru_14_89@hotmail.com
...ta
Aya
e-mail me with your answer at kaoru_14_89@hotmail.com
...ta
Aya
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August 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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April 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really lke this story, i was hopeing you could update soon!
great job!
great job!
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February 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story gives a whole new meaning to the term 'Dream Lover'. I don't think I'll be able to hear that song with out thinking of this story...not that a bad thing.
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December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh dern! Just when I was really getting into the story, there were no more chapters... Heck! Please update soon! I want to see what happens when Severus finally realizes that his dreams are not really dreams! Poor Hermione... Not the best way to lose one's virginity!
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting story so far - very erotic - keep it up!
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like the concept and I'd like to read the rest of this, but please consider adding more detail. Some stories are so packed with unecessary detail it's maddening, but your writing is actually too sparse with the details.
For example, when Snape tells Hermione to bend over the chair, you don't write what she's thinking or feeling, you just jump to a half hour later in the story. As a reader, the build up of anticipation, fear, arousal, etc. is vital, especially with HG/SS detention stories. If you don't like describing the psychological window into the characters minds then maybe a sexy one-shot would be better? Please don't take offense to this, it's meant as constructive criticism. As I said before, I like this story, it has potential.
For example, when Snape tells Hermione to bend over the chair, you don't write what she's thinking or feeling, you just jump to a half hour later in the story. As a reader, the build up of anticipation, fear, arousal, etc. is vital, especially with HG/SS detention stories. If you don't like describing the psychological window into the characters minds then maybe a sexy one-shot would be better? Please don't take offense to this, it's meant as constructive criticism. As I said before, I like this story, it has potential.
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ooh good one, and I really like that this one was longer. This story has really great potential, but I would definitely like reading some more details. Especially since there's this really interesting prospect with the dreams, I'd like to read more on the development of it. And poor Hermione, getting her hopes up for detention =( I think Snape will have to make it up to her later haha.