schedule
September 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Love this so fare send me a Emil when u update this sorry pleas update ASAP
schedule
May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
awesome please update soon
schedule
February 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please update soon.
schedule
January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, I thought there would be more angst though. Please update soon.
schedule
January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
keep going but make you chpter a little bit longer
post soon
bye bye
post soon
bye bye
schedule
January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
your story is a good one, and really witty, but your grammar and signing, well, sucks. mark what people are saying with " ......" and what they're thinking with itallics or '........'.
good luck
good luck
schedule
January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh, and i forgot to say, if you need a beta, just send me a mail and i'll do it.
schedule
January 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story line, BUT please use "Quotations" when people are speaking so that it doesn't get lost in the story. It's hard to tell the difference between what someone is thinking and saying.
More please.
More please.
schedule
January 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Tooo funny! Need chapter 5!
schedule
January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good Lord!
1/
Paragraphs have been around since before we had standardised spelling in the english language, please make use of them!
2/
Invest in a dictionary (or even use www-dot-dictionary-dot-com) for words you get stuck on, and to make sure you get the correct word. 'Wood' & 'Would' may sound the same, but I assure you they are completely different words.
3/
When you are including a device such as a letter, you need to separate the "letter" from the "story" so your readers don't have to guess. Even a simple linebreak (a blank line) would help.
4/
A dozen sentences does not equate to a chapter. What you should have called this "story" was "Heir: 50 Parts per Chapter".
Ok, now that I'm finished channelling Snape, time for the constructive parts.
If you really want to go ahead with this premise, write yourself out a plot outline of the things you want to have happen in your story; chronological order will help you to keep things together. (You don't need to put everything in all at once - when the basics is covered, then start fleshing it out with the little ideas, and work ahead from there).
Whenever you write a chapter, read through it at least twice to weed out as many mistakes as you can. A beta-reader will help as well, though they can be hard to come by.
There's more, but the best thing you can do is have a look at some of the other stories - most often the ones with lots of chapters (ie, people keep reading, so the author keeps writing) will give the best examples of structure and layout.
1/
Paragraphs have been around since before we had standardised spelling in the english language, please make use of them!
2/
Invest in a dictionary (or even use www-dot-dictionary-dot-com) for words you get stuck on, and to make sure you get the correct word. 'Wood' & 'Would' may sound the same, but I assure you they are completely different words.
3/
When you are including a device such as a letter, you need to separate the "letter" from the "story" so your readers don't have to guess. Even a simple linebreak (a blank line) would help.
4/
A dozen sentences does not equate to a chapter. What you should have called this "story" was "Heir: 50 Parts per Chapter".
Ok, now that I'm finished channelling Snape, time for the constructive parts.
If you really want to go ahead with this premise, write yourself out a plot outline of the things you want to have happen in your story; chronological order will help you to keep things together. (You don't need to put everything in all at once - when the basics is covered, then start fleshing it out with the little ideas, and work ahead from there).
Whenever you write a chapter, read through it at least twice to weed out as many mistakes as you can. A beta-reader will help as well, though they can be hard to come by.
There's more, but the best thing you can do is have a look at some of the other stories - most often the ones with lots of chapters (ie, people keep reading, so the author keeps writing) will give the best examples of structure and layout.