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for The Prime Princess

by exelon

schedule February 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like it, but still a little confusing, I am familiar with the different realms and dimentions but this was a little bid too much for a fan fic... The smut is hot hot, but there are parts that need more development to really complete for example the epilogue, 16 years after? Who is he, what about Blaise?... those are open questions...
person mlui
schedule May 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A very intriguing story and original concept. However, I got a bit annoyed (but not enough to stop reading the fic) of what would have happened. The one where Hermione died, Narcissa was alive and it didn't make sense until it was explained later on. The idea is great but I think it was a little over done. I think it was Saga (or was it, I don't remember exactly) who said that Hermione is supposed to end up with Draco. So is that who she actually ends up with? Lucius and Severus are dead. I don't think she would trust Blaise again after he tried to trap her. I'm surprised in all the multiuniverses, Hermione isn't with Harry or Ron in one of them. Anyways, this was a very enjoyable read and fantastic story! =)
person KyKy
schedule April 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like this story, although it is like a combination of Harry Potter, and Stargate put together. Kinda weird! I dont know if you did that on purpose, but the two have to much in common, not to be linked somehow.
person belixz
schedule March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
that was a fantatic chapey why do u always leave use hanging like that boooooohooooo.
im realy sory i havent reviwed u befor because i realy love this story but u gota ask how many univurses need savig now poor mione. i realy love all the diffrent relationships and love the vilan carmen who thorught a grifindor more cunning than a slythrin . and i approve verry much at the title of urs im a realy big fan of manson to anyway thanx for the great reeding lots of love.
person FlameFlameYeah
schedule December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you succeeded in destroying every character you have used. It's amazing really and I almost admire your writing for being that bad.
Rewrite this as an original story and Bang! you'd have a winner on your hands.
This, however, is complete chum.
schedule November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Real good Cant wait for more
schedule October 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Real good story cant wait for more chapter's to come in this
schedule October 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
RE: chapters 1 to 9

I wish to say that I find this story facinating. I love the concept of the overlaping of the different universes and glimps of what could have/might have been. =D

However, (I don't wish to offend you but) English is not your native language is it? The reason that I'm asking is because the sentence structure throughout the story is scrambled up a bit. As in the adjectives are switched around with the verbs as to where they should be placed for easier reading comprehension. Also some of the verb tenses were off.

Perhaps you wrote the story in a different language, and during the translating of it into English, you had difficulties remembering the proper order of a sentences' structure.

Please forgive me if I'm coming off as being a (insert insult of choice here, LOL), but I'm getting frustrated trying to figure out why your betas are NOT catching the simplest of errors and helping you fix them prior to posting. ARGH

Anyways, I enjoy the story enough to see how the other chapters develop and have my fingers crossed for a happy ending with lots of smut throughout (sorry, that is the dirty old lady in me speaking out, LOL).

;-D
schedule September 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I hope that you are going to contioune with this one it is really good

sorry about the spelling
person anon
schedule September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is the weirdest thing ever