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Ohhhh nooo poor Harry!! Look what Draco DID!!!!!! Fix it fix it!! *cough* okay sorry, momentary lapse there. LOL Good chapter! If not some what sad, but it will get better right?? I hope so....

Update soon, really really soon PLEASE!!!

~Pamela~

P.S.: I'd like to get a mail too when you update. My email is spamy91285@gmail.com

Yay! I really love this fic. When I first read the summary, I thought it was going to be silly-- but it's very emotional and well done! Please give us more soon!

Oh no!!! Poor Harry! Need chapter 6! Must have chapter 6!

He tried to kill himself??? That sucks in general.

Love this story, even though its depressing me! You're a brilliant author! Love your authoring style and careful plotting.

josh-a-licious@hotmail.co.uk

Email me when there are ANY updates!

NO no no no Draco come back and hold Harry and tell him you were joking and make Harry smile again GRRRR DRACO GET BACK HERE

more more MORE!
I love this! oh poor harry...
Stef

EEEEP!!! Poor Draco! Its all his fault! And your death will be all my fault if you don't UPDATE!!!!!!!!! LOL...

in the paragraph where you are having Snape explain the course and how he's going to have difficult tests and what not...well...this is Snape...Mr. i'm going to intimidate my classes with sarcasm and large words. Basically...i guess i'm saying you are using pretty simplistic words wich are OCC for him...instead of saying "we are going to have four big tests, say something along the lines of four difficult tests...or..something "Does that girl trying to dislocate her own shoulder?"
That needs to be changed eithert have him think " is that girl trying to dislocatae her shoulder" or "Idiot girl appers to be attempting to dislocagte her shoulder.....something.
I'm not trying to be too critical..but things like this will turn me off of a story before i even get to the plot. Try Copy and pasting your story to microsoft word and it will point out the more blatant spelling and grammer errors. Try to get a beta!!
Please keep writing and improving!

Poor Harry.
I know that you may or may not get into it in to the next chapter..but if you do for any reason feel the need to describe harrys healing wrists..please have his scars going length wise. wrist to elbow instead of horisontal across teh wrist. Horisontal across the wrist will RARELY kill someone..the up and down way is more realistic. Sorry if i'm nitpicky...but it irritates me when writers try to portray a suicide or a mental illness and do it incorrectly.
Anyway, i'm really enjoying this. Its very amusing..though i would like to see a little more of Hermionie trying to figure out why its happening..she is an insufferable know it all. Was draco affected by the potion as well or are his feelings and confusion he is having real>
I would like to read more if you will keep writing.