rate_review Reviews

Hi,
Okay, so I'm not going to rag on you or anything, because I love this plot line. I don't think I've ever read anything like it.
However, I can tell tat you don't speak English as a first language. And I hate to say it but your "American Beta" doesn't seem to either, or she would catch the mistakes. Don't worry too much about it, because the story is still readable, but you shouldn't be using 'yet' a lot. In some instances you write "till yet" the correct phrase is "till now.' And for example, in this last chapter, Snape asks Hermione what she has found in her research, she answers in the negative however you wrote "yet" at the end. In that instance it is unneccessary.
These are just a couple of suggestions for you and your beta. But really I absolutely love this story because it's an original. For some reason, I tend to love stories written with original ideas the best.
Keep on writing, you're doing wonderfully,
~Jacquie

Really enjoying the story. Update SOON!!!!!

-Grabs you and hugs you to death- thank you for updating so quickly I loved it! It's starting to get sooo juicy Yay! can't wait for the next chapter ^_^

Wow, Hermione, you naughty little witch!. Lusting for Snape.. I didn't think she had it in her Lol. I like your characterization of Snape, it'll be great to see him indirecting with Draco and Harry.

yay! Im happy that hermione was all good with the draco situation and i hope that she can convine ron of all the goodness that will come from it.

YAY!!! Great job.

Slashy Snitch

I am really enjoying your story so far. I love the title. It seems that Hermione has a little crush;and it is not on Ron! That was a good move. It is unexpected. Keep up the good work.

ooooo! do i see snape/hermione? ^_^ update soon!

ake! i love it you have to let me know when this is up-dated!

This story is so cool! i love it loads.. One thing though, you call hermione, Mrs granger, its the wrong context. She isnt married so it should be Miss. All the females at hogwarts are Miss because none of them are married. It also gives out the wrong feel. When serverus is trying to be condesending towards hermione it makes her sound older and him being the one who is the smaller person.. lol do you get me?