rate_review Reviews

I would agree with what has been said here. Your writing style leaves much to be desired, and the characters are horribly OoC. If you're going to use characters that already exist then you should use them in the style the original author has. What you have are a shell that looks like Harry, Ginny, or Hermione but have put a different personality inside.

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I think this story should be Rated R or lower. clearly this is not NC 17

wow could have been good, to bad you turned them in to little spoiled brats. but the end of the second chapter
i wanted them not to go through with it so they could die, and then bratty harry would shut up.

too much fluff, bad writhng structure,feels like you copy and pasted the whole thing.

If I had to guss I would think you are in 9th grade.