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December 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i'm so happy i cant wait for an update.
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December 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you got a lot of chapters out since last I checked! Wonderful additions, all of them. The plot is developing nicely and don't you listen to those who cry not enough smut, because smut is absolutely pointless and pathetic without plot to back it up. Smut alone is just poorly done porn that people write to get off to. I much prefer a well-developed plot with smut.
How Snape reacted to Harry, how the scent was developed, is very interesting and a new, original spin to things. I like it very much.
Quick question, do you have a beta? While there aren't any spelling errors I caught, and technically the grammar is mostly correct, it seems like a very stiff way of writing. You should consider dividing sentences with commas, which when you use seem to be in awkward places, and then there are areas where you don't use them at all that would greatly benefit having a comma thrown in. Consider getting a beta if you don't have one. I'd offer to beta for you, but I can't promise to be on every single day though I am on quite often, and it seems you update frequently. If you do want to take my offer, please feel free to e-mail me.
I hope you don't take any of this offensively, as it isn't inteded to be. I truly love the story and mean no offense, so don't take this as a flamer. Keep up the good work and I look forward to more chapters!
~Autumn
How Snape reacted to Harry, how the scent was developed, is very interesting and a new, original spin to things. I like it very much.
Quick question, do you have a beta? While there aren't any spelling errors I caught, and technically the grammar is mostly correct, it seems like a very stiff way of writing. You should consider dividing sentences with commas, which when you use seem to be in awkward places, and then there are areas where you don't use them at all that would greatly benefit having a comma thrown in. Consider getting a beta if you don't have one. I'd offer to beta for you, but I can't promise to be on every single day though I am on quite often, and it seems you update frequently. If you do want to take my offer, please feel free to e-mail me.
I hope you don't take any of this offensively, as it isn't inteded to be. I truly love the story and mean no offense, so don't take this as a flamer. Keep up the good work and I look forward to more chapters!
~Autumn
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm enjoying reading you put the she-weasel in her place (Not a Ginny fan if you can't tell). You also keep it moving and flowing but these endings? You're tormenting me, making me wait. I've never been a patient person. I look forward to more.
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hi, nice story. i hope snape and harry get soon together^^
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
draco likes ginny doesnt he? i like this story....in fact i love of. i can't wait to read more! hope you update soon, merry almost christmas!
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
all i can do is repeating myself: i love you!!!! *muahahaha* the story's so great!!!! bye bye ginny welcome snape i can't wait to read more!!!>_<
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oh an you're evil, stoppin there. now i know why i only used to read the finished fics, not havin go through the agony of waiting for the next chap.
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YEEHAW!!!!!!!!!!!!! Kick the bitch to the curb!!! What we need is some good Snarry action!!!!!!!!!1
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yea! I can't wait for chapter 14. :)
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December 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
can't wait till Severus finds out Harry's his mate please update soon