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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Riffraff,
You have a good story so far. I like you characterization of Harry and Snape. You dialogue is good too, and I hope you continue to write. HOWEVER, it contains a fair number of typos, spelling, and grammatical errors. You have a good story, but it'd be better without these errors. They detract from the story. It wouldn't take very long to have a beta reader check your story over. I'm not available for proofreading, but sugarquill.net is site dedicated to providing Harry Potter beta readers.
Take care,
Rebecca
You have a good story so far. I like you characterization of Harry and Snape. You dialogue is good too, and I hope you continue to write. HOWEVER, it contains a fair number of typos, spelling, and grammatical errors. You have a good story, but it'd be better without these errors. They detract from the story. It wouldn't take very long to have a beta reader check your story over. I'm not available for proofreading, but sugarquill.net is site dedicated to providing Harry Potter beta readers.
Take care,
Rebecca
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
dracos so cute... chucking a tantrum cause a vampire wanted to suck out all his blood ... lol
harry wants love *smiles*
harry wants love *smiles*
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow!!! another great update!!! you are so wonderful!!! keep up the good work!!! i really like your story!!! ^_^ aww it's so sweet between Harry and Sevy, it just makes me wanna squeal!! i hope there'll be more fluff... hehe
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Everyone keeps asking about Harry carrying. Will he be???? Thanx for updating!
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
What does 'rooting' mean? Is it a new slang word? I've heard of people 'rutting,' but never have heard of sex being called 'rooting.' Please get a beta reader.
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH, my. Very interesting developements. Very eager for more chapters, in this and in your other stories as well.
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yay i love fast updates!! *jumpsaround* i'm more than willing to feed your muse if it'll give me yummy vampires*drool* god, i love fangs.. you can do such nice things with them (show them around, nibble on the submissive, and so on*lol*)
well... *orders more food for the muse* please keep going ^^ can't wait to read more yummy vampire stuff *g*
well... *orders more food for the muse* please keep going ^^ can't wait to read more yummy vampire stuff *g*
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Arse kicking!
Btw, you did mention it, the reason why Hermione calls Harry 'Potter.'
Btw, you did mention it, the reason why Hermione calls Harry 'Potter.'
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm happy that Severus and Harry are together again. That last part was sweet how Harry really cares for his mate. I am getting curious as to what the vampires will do
Update again soon
Update again soon
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July 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awwww...that end of the chapter was way too cute. Loved it. And I love your writing style, the flow is easy to follow and I haven't had any of the horribly wincing moments that happen when I read a horribly written sentence. Keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to your next update.