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by ChimaeraChan

schedule July 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Questions, questions, questions - the suspense is driving me nuts!

When I pictured his tourer of the village, I thought it would last like a day but a week? Holy that just makes me even more nervous! I'm very happy Hermione is going with him, it will be interesting to see how that all works out. The Vespers - especially that Matten guy - are rather fascinating and intriguing...in a creepy way, but still intriguing none the less.

"Matten gave a soft purr and Draco snarled, whirling towards the annoying creature that kept trying to control him.
person starr
schedule July 28, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Only Hermione would find way to go with Draco...not happy here that Draco was so much of an dumb ass to go with them !!!!! so the bird is alive and so is Harry.... Thanks for the update and hope to see more soon ::):):):)):):):)):):):)
person BAFan
schedule July 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 14

Oh shit. Draco, what the hell are you doing?
person BAFan
schedule July 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 15

I repeat, oh shit. Draco, what the hell are you doing?

Deja-vu!
person starr
schedule July 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
OMG is Draco nuts to go with them !!!!!!!! he'll never get out and if Harry services he'll kill everyone !!!!!!
schedule July 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 15

That was intense! Draco giving into the call because he knew somewhere that he was sure to go mad one way or another but still silently begging for Harry to stop him - not to mention Snape throwing out his rigid handbook and doing all he could to try and keep him safe. I feel so bad for him right now - i mean the poor guy was basically waking around dead all year and now there's crazy dragons that want to do something nefarious with him while his mom is STILL trying to get him to marry that damn girl (so, so happy Draco stood up to her and told her to go fuck off), and his boyfriend is very nearly dead and invisible. Seriously it's amazing he's coping as well as he is.

schedule July 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
"Harry would will as hard as he could, and reality would just have to bend to him." - This is basically my mantra for this story, if I wish it hard enough you'll magically make it all work out.

Gah I just feel like I'm sitting on needles with all these cliffhangers! I read this whole chapter on the edge of my seat and while I'm so happy to hear what the Vesper's plans are - which basically seem like they plan on making him a pampered little sex slave - I feel even more apprehensive now. I don't trust those damn dragon's one little bit (especially since they get so randy when Draco get's angry) and I wouldn't be surprised in the least bit if they took Draco on his "tour" and then "Oops, your here to stay little one, how about some crazy fucked up sex to make you happy about it? And your possessive (insert Harry's beast name that I can't remember) accidentally just died...oh well, guess your all ours for good."

God Draco better not actually go with them but then he's being noble isn't he (at least I like to think he's doing it to save Harry instead of it purely being the call)? I like when Draco sacrifices for Harry but you know Harry's going to flip his shit if he makes it back (By the way your killing me with this!! HE better be alive!!!) only to find out Draco willingly went with them for HIM none the less. Ah the webs we weave.

So here's the plan my evil/brilliant author: One, Harry comes back alive and sane. Two, either Draco shakes the Vesper's OR Harry manages to intervene. Three, We figure out a way for Draco not to be drawn to the damn dragons in the first place and a way to make the Dragon's stop wanting Draco. and Four, they live happily ever after with Harry talking dirty and Draco laughing crazily along out of sheer joy.

Too much to ask for? Ahhh probably but if I will hard enough perhaps me and Harry will get our wish ;)

Update soon!
schedule July 23, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 13-14

Oh you are killing me with the suspense!! Not that I'm complaining, I'm rather a sucker for it, but gah!!!!! It really seems like maybe Harry's beast isn't all that bad, more like some sort of protector for whatever the heck Draco is because he's not FULL Vesper. And Draco...really all there is to say is, fuck. Those white dragons are just so evil feeling and while i love the mental image of Harry pacing angrily, throwing Draco over his shoulder and dumping him a classroom, and well...eh, covering him in his scent (love protective/sexy Harry)- I can't help but cringe inside with impending doom at Draco's unwanted reaction to them. How terrifying for them both! I mean even Jaz is freaked out, I figure that's really gotta say something. Harry is right, that ring should NEVER come off Draco's finger, especially after hearing his mother's story.

And just what is up with Draco's reaction anyway? What do they want with him?? Do they want to like turn him into something more...beastly I suppose is the word. And Draco is seriously loosing it (again, I don't mind, I have an odd thing for unhinged Draco and I would not be the least bit surprised if he did have a full blown meltdown soon). Harry better get to him before he makes it out the doors and drag him back and do...things to him ;) Though that just makes Draco more alluring and pisses off the dragons and is killing Harry more quickly...damn you've written one intriguing story line.

Alright deep breath.

On a lighter note...I have to say that I just love that you've made Harry's pen a clicking one, don't know why but the mental image of invisible Harry walking around clicking his pen makes me so happy. And Sneaky Harry for making Draco his mate without him knowing - though I agree with him, Draco would be fuming pissed but secretly dancing all hot and bothered on the inside. Harry's dirty talk in this is awesome, made all that more great with Draco knowing he's saying stuff that would piss him off but can't hear it.

Cannot wait for more!
person Emma
schedule July 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hi! Love love love the story!!! Update soon!!!!! ;)
person starr
schedule July 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
so hot !!!! and I still can't believe that they all want Harry dead !!!!!! REALLY !!!!!!!