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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ch 39) Explosions are messy... This one looks like it's gonna be REALLY messy!!!
*flinch*
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*flinch*
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy crap! I'm falling in love with this story! Last three chapters, awesome! I liked the hanging from the ceiling bit. =) I liked the way Harry comforted Draco, it was cute. H/D action soon please? Update soon!
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy smoke! I need chapter 40!
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh, sorry for the, er, lengthy disappearance. Holidays, you know, and then I came down with a nasty bout of pnuemonia, and, well, today's the 1st day I've been able to...*do* anything. lol, but, YAY! 3 fantastic chapters waiting for me that completely made my day!
Firstly, I want to comment on the thoughts that raged through my head with chapter, um, 37? I think...yes, yes, I am sooooo worried about Draco and his little plan for revenge. I think I reviewed on it some time earlier, albeit briefly, but now I keep getting this awful knot in my stomach whenever I think about it. First, of course, is the "lie" issue which breaches the "trust" issue that's already extremely frail on Harry's side. Now, I'm really not one to fail prey to the "oh let's pity Harry" syndrome but I think "trust" as a basic principle is something that pretty much EVERYONE struggles with. Now, mix in a lifetime of people staring at you because you're some kind of unwanted celebrity, lies and deception, a dash of survivor's guilt, and a decade of self-inflicted islolation and depravation...oh, and of course, the Dursleys, and you have a person that regards trust like an almost deceptive, evil thing. And yet, Harry's willing to give it a shot. Yay for him, but Draco don't screw with it so soon, man! Idiot! No wonder Theresa was nervous after her session with him. (By the by, it is so strange for me to spell Theresa with an "h"--which I think is actually correct--because my sister's name is Teresa and my mum took great pains to make sure we didn't spell her name with an "h". Some kind of bloody vice on her part or something, lol).
Anyhoo, secondly, I must confess I was also a little worried about Draco's overall character until chapter 39. Don't freak, let me explain. What I mean to say is, I didn't trust Draco. At. All.
The way you write him is so parallel to the canon--not say that there isn't a dash of OOC here and there--but it all kind of works. He's still the crafty, self-serving, snobby little rich boy that Rowling created and even a little mean spirited in certain angles in some scenes that you write him. Also, you throw in this obsession "thing" that I can only imagine spurned from boredom and now you have a Draco Malfoy that is half-mad with lust and is actually spending his time trying to heal the bloody Boy-Who-Lived (kinda makes you wonder what would happen if 'ol Voldy was still alive; if Draco woulda tried turning You-Know-Who into a sex kitten or something...you know, just 'cause). Made me raise an eyebrow and scratch my head. That being said, my POV was basically that of Theresa's. The "oh, no" sigh that tries to hide the endearing smile because, let's face it, Harry and Draco do make an awesome item, right?
Now, that being said, because you're so gifted a writer, you have given your readers three options. Or four, depending on whether or not the reader decides to hold any value whatsover to what Narcissa thinks or feels, lol. One, cheer on Draco and wait gleefully for what else he has up his sleeve. Two, bite your lip and hope for the best, urging Harry to take a chance. Or three, asess and analyze like Theresa, being slightly mistrustful of Draco's motives and worry constantly about Harry without actually feeling sorry for him. Chapter by chapter, I feel myself being bounced around with these POV's. It's a wonderful experience as a reader to be so sucked into a story that every chapter has you becoming more and more a part of each characters thoughts and feelings.
*shakes head* Amazing, really.
And thirdly, all of my inhibitions kinda melted with chapter 39. No, really. It warmed my heart. I kinda teared up. Seriously. My favorite line: "You matter." Beautiful.
I think what won me over was Draco's complete honesty when telling Harry about what happened during the war. He didn't sugar-coat anything, didn't try to put on any false bravado. And he was completely honest about not being a killer and what a complete failure that made him feel like. I don't know if I trust Draco now, but I certainly know without a shadow of a doubt that...there's something real about Draco that touches every person. A shadow of self-doubt and pride all mixed into one that everyone can relate to. And if everyone is allowed a shot at love, why not Draco? There are two quotes that are very dear to me and I think of them all the time--though I've no clue who they're by or anything. First: "Good people make bad mistakes all the time. It is, in fact, human kind's inherent nobility. It is what makes forgivness so powerful a tool. And forgiving one's self, the most powerful of all." Second: "Nobility isn't about being better than others; it's about being better than you used to be." The latter, I think, holds more truth for Draco. He's learned that, in his own way.
And then you completely wowed me with Harry and his golden Gryffindor nature, bless his soul. Off and on, I kept wondering to myself what could possibly keep Draco interested in Harry once his obsession wore off. I completely understand why Harry would fall for Draco. Draco's practically nursed him back to life. But what's in it for Draco? Really? And this chapter sealed it. There is something *good* inside of Draco, that I imagine is inside of all of us, that wasn't nutured and coaxed to life during childhood. Draco was bred. Plain and simple. And he was bred to be another Lucius Malfoy. There are two main things about Draco that I beleive make him a personality. One, he's brilliant. He knows how to read people. He knows how to hurt people, manipulate, use words to his advantage, and he knows how to make people *feel*. And not just physically. We see this time and again in the books and in your story. Two, like you touched on in Ch. 39, he's very good with potions. I kinda liken Potions to something like Chemistry just to give myself an idea on what the difficulty to understand the craft must be like. That being said, we know that not only is Draco socially intelligent, he's book smart as well. Now, being Slytherin, these traits were tools for which Draco to acheive and maintain a social heirachy at Hogwarts and making Harry's life a living hell. Which we all know, right? So, all of a sudden, Mr. Crafty-Son-of-a-Death-Eater-Brat finds himself face to face with his own moral code in his sixth year. A moral code I imagine he never knew existed. He couldn't kill Dumbledore. He's not a killer. What does that mean? Draco thought it meant he was a weakling, a disgrace, and a failure. Harry, being suddenly at the grace of Draco's carefully hidden compassionate side, sees this and realizes he needs to nurture that *good* part of Draco. To draw it out and constantly make Draco aware that being a *good* man isn't a *bad* thing. That it doesn't make him weak or a disgrace.
How beautiful is that! You're amazing. Truly.
Oh, dear, I've written...alot. Hopefully it made up for my absent reviews, lol. I understand how much they mean to a writer. In any case, thank you for the updates and have a wonderful, safe, and rockin' New Years!
Joie,
Gloria
Firstly, I want to comment on the thoughts that raged through my head with chapter, um, 37? I think...yes, yes, I am sooooo worried about Draco and his little plan for revenge. I think I reviewed on it some time earlier, albeit briefly, but now I keep getting this awful knot in my stomach whenever I think about it. First, of course, is the "lie" issue which breaches the "trust" issue that's already extremely frail on Harry's side. Now, I'm really not one to fail prey to the "oh let's pity Harry" syndrome but I think "trust" as a basic principle is something that pretty much EVERYONE struggles with. Now, mix in a lifetime of people staring at you because you're some kind of unwanted celebrity, lies and deception, a dash of survivor's guilt, and a decade of self-inflicted islolation and depravation...oh, and of course, the Dursleys, and you have a person that regards trust like an almost deceptive, evil thing. And yet, Harry's willing to give it a shot. Yay for him, but Draco don't screw with it so soon, man! Idiot! No wonder Theresa was nervous after her session with him. (By the by, it is so strange for me to spell Theresa with an "h"--which I think is actually correct--because my sister's name is Teresa and my mum took great pains to make sure we didn't spell her name with an "h". Some kind of bloody vice on her part or something, lol).
Anyhoo, secondly, I must confess I was also a little worried about Draco's overall character until chapter 39. Don't freak, let me explain. What I mean to say is, I didn't trust Draco. At. All.
The way you write him is so parallel to the canon--not say that there isn't a dash of OOC here and there--but it all kind of works. He's still the crafty, self-serving, snobby little rich boy that Rowling created and even a little mean spirited in certain angles in some scenes that you write him. Also, you throw in this obsession "thing" that I can only imagine spurned from boredom and now you have a Draco Malfoy that is half-mad with lust and is actually spending his time trying to heal the bloody Boy-Who-Lived (kinda makes you wonder what would happen if 'ol Voldy was still alive; if Draco woulda tried turning You-Know-Who into a sex kitten or something...you know, just 'cause). Made me raise an eyebrow and scratch my head. That being said, my POV was basically that of Theresa's. The "oh, no" sigh that tries to hide the endearing smile because, let's face it, Harry and Draco do make an awesome item, right?
Now, that being said, because you're so gifted a writer, you have given your readers three options. Or four, depending on whether or not the reader decides to hold any value whatsover to what Narcissa thinks or feels, lol. One, cheer on Draco and wait gleefully for what else he has up his sleeve. Two, bite your lip and hope for the best, urging Harry to take a chance. Or three, asess and analyze like Theresa, being slightly mistrustful of Draco's motives and worry constantly about Harry without actually feeling sorry for him. Chapter by chapter, I feel myself being bounced around with these POV's. It's a wonderful experience as a reader to be so sucked into a story that every chapter has you becoming more and more a part of each characters thoughts and feelings.
*shakes head* Amazing, really.
And thirdly, all of my inhibitions kinda melted with chapter 39. No, really. It warmed my heart. I kinda teared up. Seriously. My favorite line: "You matter." Beautiful.
I think what won me over was Draco's complete honesty when telling Harry about what happened during the war. He didn't sugar-coat anything, didn't try to put on any false bravado. And he was completely honest about not being a killer and what a complete failure that made him feel like. I don't know if I trust Draco now, but I certainly know without a shadow of a doubt that...there's something real about Draco that touches every person. A shadow of self-doubt and pride all mixed into one that everyone can relate to. And if everyone is allowed a shot at love, why not Draco? There are two quotes that are very dear to me and I think of them all the time--though I've no clue who they're by or anything. First: "Good people make bad mistakes all the time. It is, in fact, human kind's inherent nobility. It is what makes forgivness so powerful a tool. And forgiving one's self, the most powerful of all." Second: "Nobility isn't about being better than others; it's about being better than you used to be." The latter, I think, holds more truth for Draco. He's learned that, in his own way.
And then you completely wowed me with Harry and his golden Gryffindor nature, bless his soul. Off and on, I kept wondering to myself what could possibly keep Draco interested in Harry once his obsession wore off. I completely understand why Harry would fall for Draco. Draco's practically nursed him back to life. But what's in it for Draco? Really? And this chapter sealed it. There is something *good* inside of Draco, that I imagine is inside of all of us, that wasn't nutured and coaxed to life during childhood. Draco was bred. Plain and simple. And he was bred to be another Lucius Malfoy. There are two main things about Draco that I beleive make him a personality. One, he's brilliant. He knows how to read people. He knows how to hurt people, manipulate, use words to his advantage, and he knows how to make people *feel*. And not just physically. We see this time and again in the books and in your story. Two, like you touched on in Ch. 39, he's very good with potions. I kinda liken Potions to something like Chemistry just to give myself an idea on what the difficulty to understand the craft must be like. That being said, we know that not only is Draco socially intelligent, he's book smart as well. Now, being Slytherin, these traits were tools for which Draco to acheive and maintain a social heirachy at Hogwarts and making Harry's life a living hell. Which we all know, right? So, all of a sudden, Mr. Crafty-Son-of-a-Death-Eater-Brat finds himself face to face with his own moral code in his sixth year. A moral code I imagine he never knew existed. He couldn't kill Dumbledore. He's not a killer. What does that mean? Draco thought it meant he was a weakling, a disgrace, and a failure. Harry, being suddenly at the grace of Draco's carefully hidden compassionate side, sees this and realizes he needs to nurture that *good* part of Draco. To draw it out and constantly make Draco aware that being a *good* man isn't a *bad* thing. That it doesn't make him weak or a disgrace.
How beautiful is that! You're amazing. Truly.
Oh, dear, I've written...alot. Hopefully it made up for my absent reviews, lol. I understand how much they mean to a writer. In any case, thank you for the updates and have a wonderful, safe, and rockin' New Years!
Joie,
Gloria
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I still have ten more chapters of your story to read so far, but I just had to leave you a message. Your story makes me feel /alive/ again. It may sound silly, but I am breathing deeper, and the air tastes crisper... thank you.
I haven't felt this excited over a story in a very long time, not since I have up on Lightning on the Wave's stories, and it feels /wonderful./
I am sure that my eyes are just /dancing/ right now.
/Thank you!/
I haven't felt this excited over a story in a very long time, not since I have up on Lightning on the Wave's stories, and it feels /wonderful./
I am sure that my eyes are just /dancing/ right now.
/Thank you!/
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I've never broken my elbow, but I have fractured my right wrist once, broken it five times, broken my left wrist once, and broken two of my fingers, one three times, and one two times. I've also broken my thumbs quite a few times.
Last year I faked a broken wrist up in New York, when I was visiting with family. I insisted to be treated at home, which is why they aren't still holding me captive. =D
They belived every word, and I believe that Harry would have believed Draco. No one would expect for someone to fake such a horrid injury, and I believe that Draco did a fair job of faking. =D
Last year I faked a broken wrist up in New York, when I was visiting with family. I insisted to be treated at home, which is why they aren't still holding me captive. =D
They belived every word, and I believe that Harry would have believed Draco. No one would expect for someone to fake such a horrid injury, and I believe that Draco did a fair job of faking. =D
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December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I've been reading your story for a while now, I just found it when you were on about chapter 30 something. I really love it. I could really see this happening in the future with Harry and Draco. This is probably one of the best Draco/Harry fics I've read. Thank you for keeping them in character and such. I hope you keep up the good work. Let me know when you update yea? <3
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for adding me to the list!
I'm wondering about the part of the chapter where Draco took them into a room to be 'alone'... And I'm wondering if it has anything to do with your 'explosion'...
Can't wait to find out.
I'm wondering about the part of the chapter where Draco took them into a room to be 'alone'... And I'm wondering if it has anything to do with your 'explosion'...
Can't wait to find out.
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yes, it was soon enough. But now I can't wait for the next chapter! Impatient, am I?;)
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love you!!!!! please don't ever stop writing. you certainly have talent. I Can't Waite antil you update.