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by Strailo

person Ilene
schedule October 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You told me to go look at ur other stories and so i did. where's my reward? :P
I liked! Harry makes a great uke! *sigh* *pets bunny* I guess i'll just have to wait on that one huh? I shall keep my eye on u, cause really i have nothing better to do-study for my anatomy and medical terminology tests? why would i do that? :)
schedule July 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Do you have a mailing list? If you do, I'd like to know when you update, please. ^^
person Priss
schedule July 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I never read her story, but I wish something like that didnt happen. I am sorry for his loss...
person sanda
schedule July 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good story
person eiriyukithewriter
schedule May 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
loved the fic!! it has something that i like but i can't put my finger on it. hope your friends recover from the accident.
person Hambares
schedule January 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I am truly sorry about your friends. That is crushing. **hugs** I hope the same fate won;t befall Harry and Sev. Or their baby!
person Sophia
schedule December 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, nice story;) keep up the good work!
person marie_606
schedule December 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
why on earth would anyone complain about the sex. it was smokin'
person Ophiuchus
schedule November 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm genuinely trying to be constructive, but there are problems that have nothing to do with grammar. You say this is your first slash, and I believe it. It seems like het that had 2 HP males inserted into the fic instead. Your Harry and Severus speak like a woman's romance novel. Neither has thier own voice, neither are developed at all, even though you tried to add a backstory. This seems more like a rough draft. Try reading some of the dialog aloud and you will be able to determine the authenticity of it.
person AllyKat
schedule November 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Overall it was a sweet story. Wish you'd taken the time to check your spelling, though. It's Hemione and Severus, not Hermonie and Serveus.