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Well, I just skipped right up to 'the very bad porn' which, by the way, I would like to call 'the very hot porn'. I dont think I skipped the build-up because it was badly written.. I'm just in an impatient mood. *grins*

I really liked your story, i really think you should write more. You have good writing skills and your story is easy to follow. Don't worrie bout the idiots who think they are so good and are the best at everything themselves putting down your work. If they really don't like it they wouldn't read it. so chin up and keep up the good work and write more!!!!!!

hey i lvoed it and i cant w8 for the next chapters to me it the best ive redad all through the site

Wow! This is good hun! I loved it! When I read what was on the added section, I have to addmit, I wasn't too happy about what those reveiwers wrote. It clearly states in the summary that it's a PWP... T_T But I think your story was awesome! A great job for a first time. Much better then my first one! Keep up the great work! ^^

story overall was not 2 bad, some weird uses of words. I think your play on words and how they relate might be better for a younger audiance (PG13?) Either way, keep writing

Signed: ~Kotaro~

Great story and very hot. I would like to read a sequel to this story. It was very,very good and keep up the excllent work. I loved every hot minute of this story.

Awesome story.

I thought it was a great story...you did give people fair warning at the top before the story began so they need to fuck off with those harsh reviews...don't listen to them they are probably just envious of this story..you did an awesome job..keep it up..

> OK, I'm glad you didn't think my story was BAD, but may I remind you that I gave fair warning about the issues
> you addressed? If you paid any attention at all to my Author's Notes, then you knew damn well that the story
> didn't HAVE a plot, that it would be pure smut, AND that both Harry and Hermione would be OOC! Don't EVEN
> tell me that you didn't know what to expect!

ROFL! Did you even read what I've written? There are different ways in telling a smutty story as yours. The problem with your story is, that your wording is really cheap, as used by a 5$ crack-whore. And every story has a plot, even if it is PWP smut! Yes, even your story has a plot, even if it is barely there.

> Harry's quivering, pulsating member releasing a truckload of cum into her hungry twat?

This is a description which is highly unerotic as are most of your descriptions. They are dishonorabling the Potterverse. If you want to write a smutty !and! erotic story, you have to stop using such descriptions. You can use such words in dialogue (even if it is OOC), but not in descriptions. Your story is a cheap porn of the worst kind.

And if you can't stand constructive criticism you should not read your reviews. Better ... you shouldn't even publishing your stories.

Now that is kicking their ass. I not only loved the story but the responses where funny as hell. I hope you write another or add a few chpters 2 this 1.