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you're evil! making us hot and then stop! i hope you keep your promise and give us soon a new chap.

Damn. You are either a virgin or havn't been a virgin for a reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaally long time.Or a nympho.Or u r a guy. 2 small paragraphs between two life-long opposites and enemys meeting for their first kiss and them lying on the ground fucking their brains out. Nooooooooooooooo way would a virgin be that easy, especially not Hermione Granger. Talk about spreading easier then butter.Where was the fucking foreplay????????? I am fealing incredibly cheated here.Why should I even bother with the 2nd chapter?

ohh man .. that are they going to do now i hope rj does not open the door.... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

angel

nice lemon... but ummm RJ... EEK hugz juls

Fuck the bitch i loved it plz update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!

*bursts out laughing* If I were a prude do ya think I would be on this site???? Really? Think before u write.Anyways I am not the only one that pointed out that you went from cold to hot and completly missed warm.Foreplay should take at least a couple of chapters if your dealing with a virgin character. Heck, even the storys with Lucius Malfoy X someone had him wait around a couple of chapters and he's not exactly the type to wait now is he?I've read a couple more chapters because I am fair and I've found that in general you do tend you want to race ahead and not give enough details.Like how random was Rons death? Completly out of the blue he just dies.No mention of a potential threat. Nothing.It's like some one decided to just drop an anvil on him or something. Couldn't you have made it a bit more elaborate? Like a fight scene or something? Plus its comepletly, in every sense of the word, unlikely for Ron to ask Hermione to marry him after she tells him she is pregnant. This guy doesn't have table manners,likes to sulk and in general behaves like every tipical teenage boy. There is just no way he would marry her. Even if it were his own kid he would probably run a mile and then after much deliberation attempt a proposal. Guys are like that. As a male friend pointed out to me( and he's 24 mind) " Marriage is a complete fuck up cos when you get married thats the last girl you'll ever sleep with in your WHOLE ENTIRE LIFE. Scary. I mean why would you even want that?" Another friend reported that he had just had a HUGE fight with his girl friend because she wanted him to throw out his porn. That, my dear, is what guys of that age are like. So really, Ron should have had at least one chapter of self-doubts/panic etc. But whatever. Snape is also too cuddely.What happened?

Ooooo I love this fic so much. :) I cannot wait to read more. :)

i love this story =)

Great post, love the story, can't wait until you post again, so please post again soon. Thanks.

wow, I'm so glad this is fiction about fiction people. That reviewer up above is trying to apply RL feelings to fanfic. Anyhow, so what if they went fast and hard at the beginning, I have rad alot of stories here that have. And Ron was raised by Molly and Arthur, and so he would react like that when push comes to shove. Hedid that in CoS when he sacrifed himself on the knight. Anyhow~~ love the story still. Huggles