rate_review Reviews

do i dare ask if ron will go back to normal?

Pardon my absence. I got wound up in my writing, and your other story, and the others at Luciusville and briefly forgot to come back here. so I had 8 chapters to read before I could post. Whew, you've been busy.
Before I forget, Ch.5 at beginning you have the word dong instead of doing. NOT that I ever mind reading 'dong' mind you...

I like Hermione's sexy dancing dresses. Enriches the atmosphere to think of her twirling in them.

Chapter 9 lemons: I'm probably in the silent (okay, not so silent!) majority in liking the lemon a lot. You portrayed her first time beautifully and I thought it was pretty accurate. Remember that for every reviewer there are at least a hundred - or more - that don't bother to review at all. and I imagine as in most things, when someone is unhappy they're more inclined to speak up than when they are perfectly happy with something. So everyone has their point of view. Just don't lose sight of the rest of us who liked your lemon just fine.

And the next morning was very romantic. Truly lovers now. So - I am all caught up and waiting for Chapter 11.

I like your story as is.........

there was nothing wrong with the lemons in chapter 9. I find that with Fan Fic it is easier to critcize (watch out for my spelling) someones work then if you went to a book shop and bought a book. The difference is that with fan fic you have the nifty little review button, a published book has no option so if you did not like the book then you can throw it out or give it away. Fan fic all you need to do to voice your opinion is hit review. As I said before the lemons were just right perfect for making pie...mmmm I love pie.

quill

i liked it! i think you handled her first time very well, with dignity and sexiness.

Nothing wrong with those lemons. Just because it's fanfic doesn't mean there can't be some realism. It was her first time. What do people expect that she'll be begging him to pound her into the mattress immediately? Keep doing what you do best, which is give us a wonderful story the way it comes to you.

I didn't think there was anything wrong with the lemons in chapter 9. I hope this story continues soon.

oh please. You dont have to explain your story to us readers. It's your story and I have read much more intense stories. Just because some readers didnt like it dont let it stop you from writing what you want. Its YOUR story. Plus...this is the *ADULT*fanfiction... if the complainers are to immature to read this graphic setups... then let them take it to the tamer sites.

Red

chapter 10 is not all here

i like the lemon in chapter 9 it was very nice and romantic