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for What lies within your enemy

by sassygrl

person Leenah
schedule January 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please please continue this. It's absolutely lovely. Oh and I love the cuddly Draco and Blaise.
person Demandemon
schedule December 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great, damn it, keep going, i thought there was more but there isn't damn it i want more
person Krysty
schedule November 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
its so cute! u have got to update soon! please? i just luv it! ^_^
person vittani
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
cute definitely needs an update
person valeria
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's so beutifule
person Lita
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awww how cute! I love and I hope u update SOON!
person stef
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
cute cute! i do like this actually! not meant as an insult but you might want to get a beta-reader just so it makes things easier to read... things like filisophers is meant to be philosophers and so forth... other than that, things just like slowing down the story and putting in a bit more descriptions would savour the ... well, for lack of better word, flavour of the story.. Also you might want to put something in the summary other than the usual 'I suck at summary' thing as that usually turns readers off... Even get someone to help you with a summary if you must but i guarantee you will get more readers if there is a worthwhile summary... If you want any help with beta-ing or the summary, feel free to give me an email...
Otherwise, I do actually really like this story so far,
Keep up the good work and please update again soon
Stef
person Kara
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hey really like the story, good plot so far keep writting!!! look forward to the end xxoo
person xEVx
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hmm.. your beginning is nice, alots of options are available for you to continue the story.
Looking forward to it. Hope that in this story Draco will have a loving parents.