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November 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 1
Chapter 1 was Betaed and is now reposted! Thank you for wonderful feedback, everybody.
Slashy Snitch - my new Beta! Did excellent job. Fast. Efficient. Thank you. Good writer too.
crio - glad you like it:D
Anon 1 - Perfect concrit. Thank you so much. I went and changed those ASAP and found some more. Hogwarts with a 'z' Ouch! He,he,he!
Anon 2 - Glad you like it. You will see more, I have a lot written already. Let me Beta it first:]
Yocum1219 - First 'OMG' review! 'Amazing', heh? You flatter me so. Thank you. I will update, not every week but as soon as I am happy with the next chapter.
drippy123 - more concrit, yay! I can't express how helpful this feedback is. I changed lines to a row of stars on the middle. Hope it will work with all text sizes.
You, guys, were there when it was happening ( group hug). Thanks to you I figured this posting on AFF deal out. Chapter 2 will look much better.
madlodger
Chapter 1 was Betaed and is now reposted! Thank you for wonderful feedback, everybody.
Slashy Snitch - my new Beta! Did excellent job. Fast. Efficient. Thank you. Good writer too.
crio - glad you like it:D
Anon 1 - Perfect concrit. Thank you so much. I went and changed those ASAP and found some more. Hogwarts with a 'z' Ouch! He,he,he!
Anon 2 - Glad you like it. You will see more, I have a lot written already. Let me Beta it first:]
Yocum1219 - First 'OMG' review! 'Amazing', heh? You flatter me so. Thank you. I will update, not every week but as soon as I am happy with the next chapter.
drippy123 - more concrit, yay! I can't express how helpful this feedback is. I changed lines to a row of stars on the middle. Hope it will work with all text sizes.
You, guys, were there when it was happening ( group hug). Thanks to you I figured this posting on AFF deal out. Chapter 2 will look much better.
madlodger
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November 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Much better, huh? Lol. It's definately becoming something; and even though I'm your Beta, I wonder how Harry gets involved in this... =)
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November 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!I Love your story I Can't wait for more!!! Update soon!!!
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October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Two suggestions: 1) a beta also known as an editor to catch and repair your grammar, punctuation, and spelling mistakes. 2) Please change the dividing lines; they wreck havoc with the screen when the text size is increased, which means having to move right and left to read one line.
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October 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG...amazing first chapter...definitely can not WAIT for more!! Let me know when you update!!!
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October 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT! you're really good at writing and I hope to read more of this story
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October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like the premise of the story, with Draco covering his elven heritage and features to attend Hogwarts, and his need for a mate. The twist of him needing to be pure to receive his adult powers leaves a funny frustrated but still arrogant boy with great potential for the story.
I did notice a lot of spelling mistakes and / or incorrect word usage such as "Draco was depraved of the most basic freedom" I think you mean "deprived" and "witches disquize" and "disquize like it's happend" both should be "disguise" and "like it happened", shaddered - shuddered.
You also need to make sure you use complete sentences rather than sound bites, it will flow better and be easier to read.
DO you have a beta? If not make sure you run a spell check and grammar check once you finish each chapter. This can pick up most of the more obvious errors.
I did notice a lot of spelling mistakes and / or incorrect word usage such as "Draco was depraved of the most basic freedom" I think you mean "deprived" and "witches disquize" and "disquize like it's happend" both should be "disguise" and "like it happened", shaddered - shuddered.
You also need to make sure you use complete sentences rather than sound bites, it will flow better and be easier to read.
DO you have a beta? If not make sure you run a spell check and grammar check once you finish each chapter. This can pick up most of the more obvious errors.
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October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is great! I can't wait until you update, but I haev seen significant errors in your writing. Need a Beta? I can Beta for you...email me at SlashySnitch@aim.com and let me know; I'm great with spelling and grammar. Check my stories and see!
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October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
huh, kool, i like it