rate_review Reviews

Awww! Very sweet!

It was very OOC, but I do so love soppy stories!!! Bravo!

AWWWWW!!! That was so cute!!!!!!

I only noticed very little mistakes, one or two grammar mistakes when dealing with past or present tense, but otherwise everything seemed fine. Keep up the writing!

yeah snape is a bit ooc, but this is still sweet and made me smile.

Yeppers! That is one great present! Harry all wrapped ... errr, unwrapped!

So I'm playing a game and reading this at the same time, but I keep getting stuck on "sprayed his tights"
I'm guessing you meant spread his thighs, but when you're trying to multi-task, sprayed his tights is as far as you get.

Wow! Your first Snarry, huh? You did a fabulous job! The plot was good, and though both characters were a little OOC, it's really hard to write Snarry without them being OOC. I did notice a few spelling mistakes, but since English isn't your first language you did very well! If you plan on writing more, I'd recommend a beta just because it's always helpful to have someone double checking your work for you. I'd love to be your beta, but there are also tons of others out there if you want to look more.

Thanks for the great fic! I hope you plan on writing more!
~Aislinn Nicole