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by Marti

person Rose Evans
schedule October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love the story please keep updating. I hope your little guy gets better soon. Make sure to pack his teddy,a cupple of toys and a blanket from home. Trust me on this I work at a hospital.
person Joani
schedule October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love the story, but i hope Hermione gets over this and realizes that Severus does care about her.
person angel
schedule October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
awww sev is a softy when is comes to his little girl .. heheh sev shocked harry with is nice words .. please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. i hope your son feels better soon ... later for now

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person angel
schedule October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
man ... i cant wait in till your next update ...please soon .. later for now

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person Kris
schedule October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ever since you talked about "I've only cried in the headmasters presence twice" that has been coming back to me everytime im reading this. Would like to see Severus have an emotional breakdown (in front of Hermione), to show that he is soooooooooo sorry. Or a pensieve. But hey, im not writing this and I dont read your notes. I should probably do that XD Cant wait for more chapters of course! =P
person angel
schedule October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
~sniff sniff~ poor mione ,sev snd tristyn.... i hope mione dose get better soon and see the she has a beautifully baby girl at home that needs her ..please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

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person mekareami
schedule October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have enjoyed your story so far and I hope your son recovers quickly with no complications. Thank you for writing and I look forward to your next update
person angel
schedule October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow that was great .. please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

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person abtya
schedule October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
An interesting plot. Very good characterization and interactions. I hope you continue. My only criticism, is that you could use a beta for structure.
person Kris
schedule October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More more more! =D