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for Out of the Darkness into the light

by kelliechar

person Madietta
schedule April 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The story piqued my interest but alas, I have to admit I quit reading it after the first couple of chapters, quite exasperated to tell the truth. I wish you had it betaed. Your jumbled spelling and atrocious punctuation, or rather the lack thereof, makes it nearly unreadable. You mar an interesting theme by a language deficiency. Even bestselling authors have proofreaders and editors, consider getting one yourself. ;-)
schedule January 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I don't think Lucius is too nice or too much out of his character. He's just well cultivated in your story and I really see no problem in that. :) Harry and Voldy in one room - that's more entertainment than Hollywood could offer, for sure. *lol*