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December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The premise is interesting and I like that you try to mix it up by switching back and forth from letters to dialog to dictation. Almost all of the lines pertain to plot info though, or repeating plot info. I think it'd help if you add more lines and incidents that don't do anything but illustrate the characters or personalities of the people? Maybe do a section on Severus before going back to them fetching Harry? All the exposition seems to be dragging the story down a bit?
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November 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Add soon...
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October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Another excellent chapter, just wish they were a we bit longer. Update soon.
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October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story, but its comfusing posting the chapters in parts. it makes more sense to the reader to just wait till the whole thing is done before posting. but its a fantastic concept and i cant wait to see where youre going with it!
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October 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yay an update. this is most interesting.hope to see more. omg Severus is going to be floored when he finds out Hermione is his daughter and hopefully he'll be eating some humble pie especially after how mean he's been to her.lol can't wait to see who Harry belongs to too. now you got me hanging lol oh well. Update soon please. goodluck with jury duty.
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October 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is an excellent story line. I can't wait to read the rest of it. More please. I hope you don't get picked for jury Duty!
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October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hope this dosn't mean your removing the story because you really have me interested in how this goes pleas continue.
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October 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please, please say you will update soon, I would love to get the rest of this story. It is always great to find a completly new twist to a fanfiction, and this one seems to have the possibility to be a great one:-)
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow .. that told us a lot more about them ...please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now
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October 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Omg No way! Lol . I cannot believe it Hermione a Snape. wow. Love it so far. even though I prefer my Severus and Hermione pairing. My interests are piqued. more please. Update soon Please. good start so far. and lol I love sweet Harry. goodluck.