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for Dance With The Devil

by alissaevans444

person Queen Celestia
schedule October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ah I must point out [although most likely this has already been pointed out] that you have numerous spelling errors. So try rechecking or have someone else check over the chapter to correct it before posting? :)
person Queen Celestia
schedule October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Whoa not sure if I would have a bachelorette party in Snape Manor..
person Queeny
schedule October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hahaha parties in the common room. xD This is proving to be slightly more amusing than I first thought it would be..
person Queeny
schedule October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Harry made me laugh. "he's so .. so ew!" xD
person Queeny
schedule October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ah well at least Hermione got a heads up, instead of him just laying wand to her and giving her rather a surprise. :D
person Queeny
schedule October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Her parents talk like teens. xD
person Queeny
schedule October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Snape is pretty scarey. "OH by the way... I'm gonna also do anal on you right after. Hope you don't mind. But of course you'll be more focused on the nipple clamps I put on you."
person angel
schedule October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow that was great ... i love it and the wedding was great .... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

angel
person lisa
schedule October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ohhh myy. much hotness. Loved it. and cannot wait for more. Please update soon.
person LVanna
schedule October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my...it's hot in here someone open a window! That was Sssssteamy...more please. There is one thing though, typos before you post read through your chapter carefully and correct them. They do tend to throw me off when reading and I have to try to figure out what you meant. i.e. you typed crown instead of crowd. Other then that it's GREAT!