rate_review Reviews

That was good... I want more... what would the consequences be? And did Snape steal her quill just for that? I like this though.

you're right, it was utter crap

ANON that is not fair!

Yes! There is room for improvement, a few spelling mistakes and grammatical errors but overall not bad at all, especially for a first time fic. Your plot is good and you have a great deal of potentional. Practice makes perfect! I have no doubt that you will improve with each piece you write especially if you get constructive critism and not nasty comments (makes me wonder why some people even bother). Overall, I enjoyed this and look forward to reading more fics from you. Keep up the good work and don't let nasty comments discourage you. Toodles.

it was alright :) lol snape.

This was really good, im thinking you should do a follow up. Im crap at this, but maybe she should write a crap essay on perpose. I dont know. I really enjoyed this.

Go you!!

It wasn't crap at all, it was very good for a first time. I'm looking forward to reading more from you :o)

Not bad, you need a beta to fix spelling and grammatical errors and you need to characterize a bit more but over all a good first go at it! The one thing that jumped right out at me was the fact that after you said he magically bound her wrists over her head she proceeded to reach down and fondle herself. :-) Keep writing! LK

Yummy! You should continue this! :D

It wasn't crap. It was a good idea, and had some original points. You merely need to practice, as does everyone when they begin.