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I'm glad that you showed his interaction with Draco....and how confused draco got..that was just priceless.

I can't wait for your version of year three..Sirius escaped the prison because he saw wromtail in the newspaper in rat form if i remember correctly...i'm really intererested him how Sirus will react to his best friends son being taken care of by his enemy. please don't make sirius bad..just...overly gryffindor...as in acting withotu thinking. Like maybe have sirius kidnap harry and think that Snape just recently tried to convert harry to being a Sub...like in siriuses mind have him think that harry came from the dursleys normal and "that greasy git" corrupted him...and then be taught otherwise...i think it could be a great adventure...and a funny one at that. ..well...kinda sad as well..but...still..it would be great.

I really, really like your story.
It's terrific. Thanks R

Great chapter, I liked the meeting with Draco

I really like your idea and I hope you stick to both stories, the first and then the second.

You really are quite the speedy writer. I love how you just pop these chapters out lol. And for english not being your first language, you're doing an excellent job. I wouldn't worry too much about the grammer, that's a struggle for everyone lol But a good beta should be enough help with that.
I think, for the most part, you should just focus on Harry learning to be a real sub and trying to come to terms with his past. Abuse victims tend to get a little angry about what happened to them once they relaized just what had happened to them. I would expect that once Harry is a little older, he would be quite angry at Vernon, and maybe a little rebelious towards Snape.
I look forward to the next chapter. I'm interested to see how Harry's second year of Hogwarts goes and if anyone ever figures out about his submissiveness. I get the impression that Draco will probably be one of those people, though I don't know how you'll have him behave. I'm curious to know if you'll ever have Ron and Hermoine become Harry's friends, or if Ron will continue to taunt him.
Cant wait for the next update, I'm really loving this fic.

still great!!!
I thought your grammer and language skills were fine. Don't worry. As to whether you should split the relationship between school and after or as you say pre-relationship and relationship. It might be a good idea.

The sequal sounds great. Also just an idea but boys usually start getting sexual urges around 12-15 you could write something about Harry not knowing excatly what to do when he gets an erection that doesn't want to go away and have to ask his master about it. The you could see how Severus deal with that infront of Harry as well as what his thoughts are afterwards when Harry leaves to err deal with the 'problem'.

loved the chapter ^_^ by the way i find your grammer very good

I really like where this is going, and I love the length of the chapters. I think you're doing a wonderful job, and I can't wait until the next chapter. *twirls*