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Oh my, next chapter plz! =D

Whoa Harry's running?!

Ms Figg, you continue to astound me with your writing. This story is very poignant however. I love Minerva and her little digs at the Dementor. My fingers are crossed that she and some of the others will make it through. You are going to have a time of it if this works for Harry. The Dementors also kissed those who "deserved" it. Hmm, who is to tell who should be retrieved?

Ah a good chapter.

Btw you made a typo. When Hermione isn't eating that much and Severus eyes her disapprovingly, you said he usually had a hell of an appetite instead of she.

Other than that, everythings great!

Aw I was hoping Hermione would respond to what he said, calling her a succubus. succubus my ass.

Three new chapters! Wow. And good ones, too. Can't wait to see how Severus's feelings will develop in the future, and what will happen to Harry. Poor thing. :/
Sex on the beach. How romantic lol.

...wildly writhing witch...That brought a grin to my face. LOL Hmmm, so he's hearing things he didn't want to hear...tough.

Another Lovely Chapter. Although, I never expect anything less from you. you are an excellent writer. I love this story, and every other one of your stories I have read. I did notice one thing though, in all of your stories you use the term deatheater. In the novels it's actually Death Eater. Not a big deal, just a technical thing

I think that your writing is brilliant. Very inventive, and I love the story of the origins of the Dementors, a neglected area in all Potterology.

But, I wish you or your beta liked commas. It is very strange to read drosslike run-on sentences amongst the gold. It interferes very much with the reading experience.

Who is your beta?

Sincerely,

Carol

Takemeaway: Yes, I have always used Deatheater or deatheater. I think it is because I have never read the first 5 books, but listened to them on audio. I used to spell Pomfrey...Pomphrey as well, and McGonagal rather than McGonagall. I have to break the Death Eater habit. :(

Carol: I do my own editing as I write because sometimes I do two or three chapters a day and don't have the patience to wait on a beta...so any run-on sentences are my fault. I also don't use betas because there are some technical no-nos that I use when writing which would never get by them. No-nos I want to use. So, there it is.

Awesome! Two chapters up at once! I love it! That was really intense when Severus discovered that Harry is like a doorway to the Dementors. I wonder if they will share this info with Albus before or after they've made the attempt to save them???

Please update soon! I really look forward to reading more!

Shiloh