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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting story. I like it. Please continue.
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i love it. hmmm, it was scrumptious.
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yummy yummy yummy!
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
waaayyy cool! update soon! :)
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
HOTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love you. Virtual slave huh? Kinky. lol. I love it I can't wait for the next one. You are amazing. Snaps and warm fuzzies for you. If you ever need help or anything like that I help all my favorite authors when they have writers block (lol of course by then I consider them friends.) Well I guess I'll see you later.
MSN ~ Kamaguro@hotmail.com
Yahoo ~ Kimothy_the_Sage@yahoo.com
~Briar~
MSN ~ Kamaguro@hotmail.com
Yahoo ~ Kimothy_the_Sage@yahoo.com
~Briar~
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I really love your idea of using the five senses very intriging and well, hot. :) Wonderful writing can't wait for the next chapter.
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting! Great start, can't wait to read more. One thing I would change is some of the spelling errors...sorry, but they detract from the story. Here goes: corrections are in ().
delecate (delicate), contemplaiting (contemplating), tounge (tongue), manacured (manicured), manuvered (maneuvered), cum- cheesy (use come), bellybutton- use navel instead(more refined and more British), peritinium (perineum), instead of underpants (sounds childish)use boxers, briefs or underwear. Does that help?
delecate (delicate), contemplaiting (contemplating), tounge (tongue), manacured (manicured), manuvered (maneuvered), cum- cheesy (use come), bellybutton- use navel instead(more refined and more British), peritinium (perineum), instead of underpants (sounds childish)use boxers, briefs or underwear. Does that help?
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You're right, I do love it, can't wait for the next chapters.
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well done! Glad there will be more.
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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*stretches, sniff* hmmmmmmm intertesting.. id like to read the rest of the chapters.. Update soon