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I think that Ron should top. Or they could switch :p It's true that Hiaro has done it before, but he could tell Ron what to do, guide him if you will. Oh yeah, and is Hari and Simone going to be a couple? and why haven't you mentioned Hermione in a while? She kind of just disappeared :-\.. Well, anyway... i loved this story and i hope you update really soon!

I think you should have Hiaro (is that how you spell it) top at the beginning until Ron gets more comfortable with it. I can see both of them topping but Ron more often.

It would be nice if Hiaro topped because as King, Ron is already in control, but in the bed room he can relax and enjoy the ride ;)

Ohh. forgot to add that I love your story, its got a good plot and you are doing well, bad spelling and all. I will take bad spelling over bad plot anytime. You make the story sound very plausible. Ciao

Hmmm, I like this so far, and I'm dying to see what you'll come up with. As for who should be on top, I'd suggest having Hiaro be dominant until Ron gains more confidence, then having them trade off, but that's just me.

i think that ron should be dominant...cause hiaro can show him and it would be weird for ron to be bottom....cause he is like..how should i say this...more manly...and then they can just switch after that...but for sure i think that to start off ron should be top...cause it just makes more sense...but that is just my opinion...

THANK FOR UPDATING SO SOON!! pLZ continue...and i hope that helps u

I think Ron definitely has to top, he's a natural top. Even you said it describing him as this masculine, oh-so-hot man (wet, disheveled Ron with a sword... mmmm, yumi) while Hiaro has been described as more feminine and submissive to Ron. I'm sure Hiaro is just dying for Ron to take him, he's craving it, but maybe he wants to top from the bottom?. That way he'll be doing all the work and Ron can lie there, enjoy and stare to his beautiful Hiaro. Oh, the hot mental images! *faints*. By the way, what's happening with Hermione...?. Maybe in your sequel Ron and Hiaro could switch roles, surely then Ron will be more confident in his sexuality and their intimacy. Harry and Draco are such a lovely couple... *sighs*

Please take the time to have your story beta read--don't be lazy. (unless it is removed, as I'm going to report you to the site administrator) And by the way, I know you are under 18 and not old enough to access this site. How do I know? Because you don't the difference between 'there,' 'their' and 'they're,' 'two,' 'to' and 'too.' Most children by the age of ten have learned this. So you're either a primary school dropout, or an American teen. (American high schools are known their poor teaching and lazy students) I suspect the latter. If you are going to continue to plague the Internet with your writing, I suggest you ask one of your teachers from your school to help you. Also, I encourage you to tell your parents that you write graphic slash. I don't think they'd approve.

Fire your beta reader and get one who knows English. She's doing a crappy job.

chapter's good but you spelt dilemma wrong! you wrong delima