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September 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I applaud your ambition in attempting to publish your writing. However, before any publishing house would accept you, you really MUST learn to clean up your grammmatical mistakes. A case in point, from your last chapter:
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September 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
There is no way a young woman like alicia would address an older wizard like Dumbledore as "albus". Your stury is nice, but the dialogue all sounds unrelentingly American, not British at all. You should go check out the many sources out there to understand and use british english. This is like listening to bad Buffy dialogue fromCalifornia.
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September 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This story is good! I can't believe Harry, Ginny and Ron would say something like that to Hermione! I can't wait until the next chapter and the news to the students about Hermione and Severus Snape! This is going to be rich!!! Please update!
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September 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! Good luck with your book, its sounds really interesting and I for one would love to read it.
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September 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, well Harry I think your in for a big surprise now knowing that he's good I guess you can call it! =P
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September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter!! :)
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September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Fab chapter! I just hope Ron will not do something so stupid that he will get himself in horrible trouble. Course I would't put it past him the idiot. Sorry if my writing looks bad but i'm typing one handed and holding a 12 day old baby in the other. Update soon
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September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great update and oh yeah, Ron is a JERK and he better not do anything to try and harm Severus and Herminone's child or there will be hell to pay.
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September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Dudley. OH DUDLEY *shudders* Oh well, lets see where this goes from here. Cant wait for more chapters!
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September 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Excellent chapter, I don't blame Severus for being angry they shouldn't have been so stupid. Can't wait to see how hard He is going to be on them *snickers*