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September 9, 2019 at 12:00 AM
Good story but slow and you could write longer tractors too bad some finished but the story premise is good and relatively readable
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November 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chap 25, try this:
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November 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good story, even if somewhat stretching credulity. Whoever was your beta let you down. Sorry, but there you have it.
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August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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August 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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March 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.
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February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
are you going to update?
cause i really like this story
cause i really like this story
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November 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hmm. not too sure on this story... i mean, it doesnt really hold your attention like some stories do but i still see potential, and there are a lot of grammar errors. also, some parts jump around too much, and others move too slowly. try planning them out and getting it to flow better. also consider getting someone to beta the story. it would make a world of difference. if you'd like, i can beta any further chapters for you. give me an email if you want to take me up on that offer. =)
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November 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
man poor mione ... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon iwould love to read more ...later for now
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November 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
@30. OMG harry and ron are real prats!...but I love this story, it's awesome. I hope you update soon