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for Serpent's Bite

by SilentSilhoutte

person cedar
schedule September 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
pls update!!!!!!!!!!:) i am straving for the chapters!!!!!
person Megan Consoer
schedule September 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Karen
schedule September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very good and interesting first chapter. Neville being a naked molerat is funny.

Your English is excellent, but you should get a beta to proofread for minor mistakes. "infact" should be "in fact", "whimp" should be "wimp", and Severus has many pints of blood in him, so a half pint of Veela blood would not be correct. Perhaps you should say half his genes instead?
person Megan Consoer
schedule September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person cherie
schedule September 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I need more!!!! Pretty please?!!! This is great so far. I can't wait to see what all happens.
person zoe
schedule August 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
interesting start I look forward to reading more
person Redlightspin
schedule August 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
lets hope shes part cat shes gonna need those nine lives
person MagicalAngelForever
schedule August 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OOH! Update soon! Very interesting so far.
person Kathryn
schedule August 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Promising start I hope you keep going! :)
person Miepje
schedule August 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Snape as a Veela? Sounds very interesting. I'm looking forward to see what will happen.

And what does Hermione see at the end of the chapter? Can't wait to find out. More please?!