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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please get a beta. Your dialogue is confusing, and your spelling mistakes distracting. You've a good premise and a wonderful turn of phrase, but you need a beta to clean it up for you.
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wOW???? I am not sure if that was rape or not???? But well done, and er? What was it that Hermione did to make Lucius blackmail her?
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn! Wish it were me! Can't wait to see what happens next!
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great smit. i really liked it, maybe a little rough for me thourgh but good non the less. so where are you going to go now? (wiggles eyebrows.)
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay where's the lemon????? MORE! That was hot!
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great first chapter I am impressed as usual :D Lucius is damn fine hehe and he sounds like a knicker wetting experience hehe
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Such an arrogant git. This sure looks like fun. :)
I will be on holiday until next weekend (beginning of September), so I won't be able to review for like a week. Don't worry, though, as I will read everything you posted in the meantime as soon as possible afterwards. Your stories are always just so brilliant, hon! :)
I will be on holiday until next weekend (beginning of September), so I won't be able to review for like a week. Don't worry, though, as I will read everything you posted in the meantime as soon as possible afterwards. Your stories are always just so brilliant, hon! :)
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Lucky, lucky Hermione! Lucius AND Krum? *fans self*
Update soon!
Update soon!
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT! only can't we like 86 Mrs. Malfoy the frigid wife and do something great. though this is your story. wait to read the rest.