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for A Long Way Back ~ Editing

by Ms_Figg

person Chavela
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Eight!!!!

OMG! Three of my most favorite characters to ever grace your stories, are gain in another one! *dies* Love them all!

I can not wait to see what Adam does with Hermione! *giggle snort*
person Chavela
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 13!

Well, thank goodness Mind-Hermione gave it to the witch like she needed it. I know remorse and gtuilt can fuck a person over, I know! But damn, all that shit was annoying. People do live after what happens, so it was irritating to watch this.

This was a damn good chapter, though.
person veelamurmeli
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
unbelievable. this story started just fine until.. adam sweetmeats. why do you have to write him into every fucking story you have? well atleast almost every. it would have been more fascinating to see the change in hermione at a real pace not assisted by mister sweetmeats and his beauty parlor. it seems to me that you don't have enough imagination and creativity to have original plotlines in your different stories, therefore you use vashti and adam.

i really liked the beginning of the story, the inner agony of hermione, the adventurer severus and his straightforward behaviour. but now i really can't finish this story because of your vampire fixation. i would have liked to know more about the elixir and the possible resurrection of harry but alas, it is now impossible.
person Chavela
schedule October 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Prologue...

Well... a talk. I can only begin to wonder where Severus is going to lead a talk with Hermione.

This was a great start. Poetic in the downfall Hermione has built for herself. And not a truer statement has been uttered: and there is no judge more damning than one's own heart

Wonderful start!
person Queen Celestia
schedule September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ahaha midnight swim.
Damnit I want a swimming pool even more now! But one like that one.. which doesn't exist.. :emostar:
person Queen Celestia
schedule September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's kinda a heart wrenching lemon cuz there's the possibility of Severus loving and leaving.

But wait. This is a Figgy story. :) Ok no worries there.
person Queen Celestia
schedule September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awww pillow talk before the full monty. xD
person Queen Celestia
schedule September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I had a feeling Harry had got reincarnated as Ron's son!! Dun dun dun. Mr. Shaman please come along and fix things!!
person Queen Celestia
schedule September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The Shamans comment about arrows whizzing my Severus made me think of Indiana Jones and now I have this hilarious version of Indiana Snape going on in my head. Oh merlin. xDD
person Queen Celestia
schedule September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sniff sniff.