rate_review Reviews

Okay, overall I enjoyed reading the story. I know these are the author's stories and they can do what they want, but I really dislike when someone dies and their 'mate' immediately switches their devotion to another. I understand that Hermione had feelings for Severus but she LOVED Voldemort and to immediately be in the arms of Severus after her love died, what does that say about her? This will not stop me from reading additional stories but it's one of my peeve.

Excellent! Hermione is in for a rude awakening when she comes out of whatever fog she is in that lets her do the things she is doing to those she cared for most. It was surprising that Ron killed himself instead of being more determined to fight with Harry to free Hermione. It is too bad that no one noticed how depressed those kids were getting. reading on...p

Excellent story so far. Sorry about not reviewing each chapter, but this site will not allow that and I never know when it will cut me off saying that I can only do one per day. Very interesting how Tom seduced Hermione to his side; much as he did with all of his other followers. I am sure that he considers her quite a feat since he got her away from HP. I was hoping that the chalk on the floor was some type of protection, but was obviously wrong. Can't wait to see how this turns out. p

I greatly enjoyed your story, although I am more inclined to the Voldermort & Hermione ruling the world endings! Still, I enjoyed this. I believe my favorite parts of the story was getting a glimpse into Tom Riddle's school life and seeing how he ruled and manipulated his housemates so effortlessly.

Interesting story. I'm glad she ended up with Snape. You don't need a beta reader. I think your work stands on its own just fine by itself.

Cosmyk

well that was an abrupt and not altogether coherent ending. felt like you just wanted to finish everything off somehow but it wasnt really plausible how hermione literally seconds after being a weak and useless thing pulled away from the man (supposed monster) she just knowingly abandoned her friend for by passionately declaring her unwavering love, suddenly flings herself into severus arms and takes him as the adoptive father of her child - which for some unexplained reason has red hair and green eyes (like neither the family of hermione or that of tom) which was supposed to somehow be a preventive measure to harry. i mean forgetting the fact that we have more than nine months there in which severus isnt even mentioned and does not appear to be flirting or challenging her at all. the totality of his explained feeling is his kiss and wish to bed her when she was with him for a matter of short hours when she returned from 1943. that is all a massive and illogical leap somehow. not really coherent at all.
but then its not really an enormously logical step where the story started - with someone almost entirely cerebral as hermione suddenly tossing over her entire belief system, her loyalties to her friends and her own better judgement and leaping at tom riddle - the man she believes is the worst thing in the world - just because he is so 'pretty'.
senseless. readable but senseless. at least you are able to master there/their/they're and your/you're and dont have characters being 'drug' anywhere or saying things like 'could of', 'had of', etc. Thats more than can be said for most.
i'm just disappointed in this ending. i expected more. a slight measure of willful suspension of disbelief is fine - i was willing to put that up for the initial premise - but the ending is a leap too far. you have an eloquent and readable style and for the most part i enjoyed the story - nevertheless...

wow i read all of the story today and i n=must say BRAVO!!!!!!!!!! *kisses*

RE: chapter 6

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I was thinking that Tom was going to send Lily back into the past so she could be Harry's mother. Thus making Harry his grandson and Heir.

Omg I love this story it was awsome...
ok well I might be interested in the other ones you are write so keep a look out if I review on some other ones