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PLEASE PLEASE FINISH THIS STOORY PLEASE!!!!!!!

I am enjoying your story and looking forward to whatever comes next, even if it is a bit melodramatic. After reading your other reviews, I see that you have had grammatical and spelling issues in the past. Apparently, you have fixed most of them. However, there are still a few: in the first chapter there are a few extraneous 'I's in various sentences, you are missing some commas and periods, you wrote 'except' when you meant 'expect', and most distressing for taking me straight out of the story - a fowl is poultry, you meant 'foul'. You made this latter error twice in the same serious speech. Spellcheck and Grammatik are not going to tell you if you have the wrong word if it is spelled right and the same part of speech as the word you intend to use. This can only be found in a rigorous editing process. Good luck though, I look forward to reading more.

I'm so loving this!!! Please you must update soon, plese... I Must know what happens next! I love the way you've made them =)

this is an amazing story.
please update soon, and when you do, will it be possible for you to email me with the next chapter(s)?

I love Pansy! And Ron rocked! Update please!

Thankyou, thankyou, thankyou. I read it all again and it was so much better now that everything is fixed. I'm sorry for blaming you for something your spellchecker did as well as a site malfunction so I'm reviewing to say that this fic is just as wonderful as I'd orginally thought it was. So keep up the great work and update soon cause now I can't wait for the next chapter.

- Incessant_Darkness

Um what the hell? Why are you spelling 'Malfoy' 'Malloy. It's really annoying and quite a turn off to an otherwise wonderful story. And is it just me or was this entire thing done in a rush. From what i read you haven't read this over at all before posting it. There are words missing and sentences without periods and some little bits that don't make sense and are therefore quite a distracttion from the story.

Um unless you can stop from calling him 'Malloy' and maybe just read it over once before posting it so that you catch some of the little things I think I'm going to find it quite hard to continue reading this fic.

But I'll leave you on a good note. Which is that the story is definitely intriguing and plot wise you did a wonderful job with this chapter. Keep it up and update soon.

PS. sorry if that was kinda flamey, it wasn't meant to be.

- Incessant_Darkness

hey, I think you're story is pretty good. I've noticed a few mistakes in it, however. First, you skip a lot of ... and ,,, second, you write Draco's last name as Malloy, while it's MalFoy. Just thought I'd point it out...
But please continue, I like it!

Interesting fic. So it was all a bet for Draco at the beginning but he fell for Harry along the way. Blaise, is a slythern indeed, stealing Harry right out from under Draco's nose. I suppose Draco doesn't deserve Harry but does Blaise? Is he really in love with Harry or just in lust? Poor Harry should stay far FAR away from slytherins, all size and shape. Please update soon.

I absolutely adore this fic. At first I was like this isn't going to brilliant or anything cause the summary was weird for me but then I read it anyways and boy am I glad. It was pure gold in my opinion, mainly cause things are going I hoped most fics would [with the exception of Draco being on top but I can see how that would work better for this fic]. Anyways You've definitely got talent and I so I encourage you to update as soon as humanly possible and you will have a very happy reviewer on your hands. [PS. usually i offer up a morsel of critisim just to be level and all but this fic was too good for me to try]. I especailly liked how you pulled off Ron's point of view without it being weird and then switched so seamlessly to Draco's. I can't wait for the next chapter.

- Incessant_Darkness