rate_review Reviews

Really love the story so far. One of my favorite parts is your response to Lady Lynn. I will never understand why they think that stories are supposed to follow the books. If they want to read those, surely they have access to them. Anyway, glad that this story is finished so that I will know what happens as I do not see a way out (barring LV's demise). reading on... p
ps: I cannot review each chapter as I would like because it will cut me off and tell me that I cannot enter more at some point. sorry, but know it is not because I don't think it worth reviewing. p

What about Ron? He was blatant about his attempts to rape her AND he said that it is what he would do to any girl he found up there. Not only should she have told her Dad, but some kind of action should have been taken against him. Nice to see her and Harry together and for him to recognize what she is sacrificing for him (and the wizarding world). p

RE: chapter one

Ron is a scuz-bag for having cheated on Hermione--what a dumba

RE: chapters two and three

Great story so far, however, it is riddled with many errors that can easily have been caught by a spell check, a grammar check, a punctuation check, and a good Beta reader. There were too many errors for me to list without the review taking up the whole webpage just to list them all. Sorry.
:C

Well, I'm off to chapter four.
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A red auroa appeared around the students, the oath was valid, the contracts were signed, all they had left was the initiation meetings.

"Very well, Be here, Thursday night, We will be leaving for the initiation and marking ceremony, Remember, do not let ANYONE know anything about what is going on, You signed the contract, you made the oath, and do not treat Hermione any differently, Treat her as you have been treating Paige."

Periods are your friends. Use them.

Spelling Corrections:

You put "Voldermort" when it should be "Voldemort" (no R).

You also put "Dumbledoor" when it should be "Dumbledore".

altogether, this wasn't a bad story. I do wonder what happened to hermione's muggle parents as this was never addressed. I would advise you to use a spelling and grammar check in the future. Mistakes can sometimes detract from your story line, and misspellings are SO easy to avoid.

Ooooh!! I like it!! I know the story's almost done, but can you try your best to add a bit more Ron and Pansy into the story? Please and thank you! :D Oh, and update a.s.a.p!

awwwww this is such a good story. please continue soon:)