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for Dear Lily *COMPLETE*

by Rumpelyssa

person Dixie50
schedule February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 11. Oh that wicked werewolf has bit Hermione
AND interrupted a mojor kissy scene. I HATE HIM
person Dixie50
schedule February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Poor Hermione ! What a predicament in the Werewolf's cave. I love Severus as a pussy cat.
person Dixie50
schedule February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ch 13. Quite interesting.
Am wondering about the fake Minerva too
Snape in purple... I like !
person Dixie50
schedule February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ch 14

Charming descriptions of Spinners End
EEEEEEEEEEK Fenrir - a cliffhanger !
person Dixie50
schedule February 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
'. I watched Hermione pick up a sausage and as she wrapped her mouth around it I shifted in my seat. DOWN BOY! She bit into it slowly, and then she chewed it for a while she looked up and saw the dark, intent look in my eyes, she blushed. Thankfully, no one else noticed.'

bwha hahh ha ....down boy
person Dixie50
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Just read Chapter 1.
It is me, aussie annie from SWARF.
It was a strong start. Using a 'diary' format allows the inner Severus to speak frankly without having to modify his behaviour. It was great to see he is noticing Hermione. Nothing creepy yet. She is 17 and he appears to be controlling himself.
I will read on...
person Dixie50
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW Chapter 2 is very well written. Changing the diary's name to Lily, made it better than "taliking to himself" as in Chapter 1. I found there was much more spark here. The "English" was more clear too.
I look forward to Chapter 3.
person Dixie50
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3
Another good chapter. I found the "staring a boobs" very amusing. Draco is still a little creep. Very bold of Severus to sneak a kiss in, but he could be dead or captured at any time so "what has he got to lose ?". Also as he is no longer the Teacher then "Go for it, mate !"
person Dixie50
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4
Another good chapter.
"
'I used to think you were worth listening to,' echoed round inside my head Merlin how can I redeem myself."
lovely.. I shall read more tomorrow.
person Dixie50
schedule February 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ch 5. oh no. the Dark Lord has turned up. I wasnt expecting that. The plot thickens !