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If you do not write more, I swear on my sister's grave I will find you!! It has the potinetial to be a... awesome is so over used and good just doesn't cut it... to be a magnifisent story!! I could beta but it would be my first attempt so you might want someone more experienced, huh? Well, whatever. It was great. Post more!

They have a adultfanfiction.net Beta list in Yahoo groups. you really need one. it's a very depressing start. but keep working hard at it. you might want to read over your own work before posting it. you might catch your own errors such as miss spelled words and the like. Well i will keep readng. poor harry and i got a bad mental image with veron so now i need to go find some nice happy things to get that out of my head... gah.. here is the link for the beta site.

http://groups.yahoo.com/group/AdultFanFictionBetaReaders/

Miki

Well that was short...

Nice start! But you are right. Longer please!!!

I think I'm going to be sick. But other than that your imagery was good enough

You might want to proofread your chapters before you post them. There is several grammatical inconsitancies and spelling errors. Other than that it seems to be a half-way decent storyline.

All the best,
Nuka