rate_review Reviews

What have you written, Shadowknight? I would love to read anything you've written, it must be New York Times Bestseller List caliber. Perhaps you have been nominated for a Pulitzer Prize in Literature???

You need a beta and more to make this a good story. I also see from what I've read that you know little of the D/s lifestyle that you have portrayed here. There are much better examples than this story for the lifestyle.

The technical quality of the writing is mediocre at best. Dialogue buried in paragraphs, and many other grammar problems abound.

Good, but now what...

Once more I have to say - good work! I think that a conversation between the two is in order as to Severus' expectations. As she pointed out, how was she to know that she was to defend the Snape name when she was taught to be silent and meek? Hope you update soon.

I am sorry to say your story is quite bad...but very humorous. Thank you for making me laugh...the whole scene with Snape whipping Hermione's back to shreds for "discipline" then her running off to the hospital ward and then eventually "taking" Snape back because she "loved" him was so appalling...unless you meant for it to be parody/cliche? Your story lacks plot, characterization, and any emotional attachments between Snape and Hermione...not to mention fragmented sentences, thoughts, and disorganization. However with that being said, I commend you on having the courage to post your writings...it is very (nay, extremely) difficult being a new author and have to take criticism when it is offered in reviews. I am not trying to discourage or to disparage your story or abilities, only to offer another point of view...I would rather someone suggest extensive review or rewriting of a story I had written rather than tell me how much they "enjoyed my story or to please update more" when in actuality my story needed more work.

THAT WAS GREAT SO TOTALLY WORTH THE WAIT (but could it not have been a little longer?). would LOVE another update soon! (mostly this story but any of the SS/HG stories will do, THANK YOU!)

OMG! I was sobbing my little heart out reading this chapter.. it was amazing!!! You captured the emotion perfectly I love how he is showing remorse hehe
Hey what has happened to Voldie is your story?has he been destroyed?

im glad sev got rid out the bad wips and the chair .. please please update soon i would love to read more later for now

angel

Your welcome..you've done the same for me. Can I go to sleep now???? :)

What a WONDERFULL story! I've been enarmoured with Contracts and I've pleaded with the author to continue more than once. So glad you've taken it upon yourself to write a sequel. And what a marvelous sequel it is. I hope you'll update soon.