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May 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
nox_lumen@hellokitty.com
Because something is so far gone in the formatting that I would have to drop it in a word doc and add the paragraphs that should have been there in the first place in order to read it, and you have some typo's as well. If I will be doing it any way and you could use the help, it seems silly that we not connect so you can take advantage.
Because something is so far gone in the formatting that I would have to drop it in a word doc and add the paragraphs that should have been there in the first place in order to read it, and you have some typo's as well. If I will be doing it any way and you could use the help, it seems silly that we not connect so you can take advantage.
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July 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Only, aside from the grammar mistakes, I have to say one thing that popped up at me was your spelling! You kept switching back and forth between Alastor and Alaster---his name is Alastor. I would recommend when writing fanfiction that you at least get the names spelt correctly--especially if they are one of your main characters. I remember reading this story a few years ago, and I have to say I'm not into it as much I was then. I blame college English classes, they've melted the creative side of my brain--all I seem to see lately is mistakes, it kind of takes away from the story. Perhaps a Beta reader would help you?
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December 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow... I really really liked this story... I was kinda squicked in the beginning... cuz the mental image of Moody having sex was a little disturbing... but then it just got better and better and then it ended... *Sigh* I want more... and if that never happens thats okay this was still a great read! ^_~
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July 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ur story is amazing
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
If this has been beta'd, he/she didn't do a very good job. You have a lot of spelling/grammar errors.
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August 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Intersting so far...one note though...
in chapter 1:
except is for an exception to the rule
accept is for accepting a gift...the book scene should have been "I can't accept this,".
in chapter 1:
except is for an exception to the rule
accept is for accepting a gift...the book scene should have been "I can't accept this,".
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August 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed your story...i am looking forward to a new update!
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July 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is really good, but, like every story, it can be improved upon. There are some grammatical errors, as well as spelling mistakes, and punctuation errors. If you want or need someone to beta for you, I'm willing to do so.
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May 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well done with this fic! I was really impressed. It hasd been a pleasure to read. xx
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December 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I would love to see the continuation of this stry. It was short, but very cool. I always thought that there was something funny about Hemoine!! XD