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by mylovesagar

schedule April 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I like the disection your story is taking. It is good. I think you need to reply less on very formal coversations and put a little more thought and feelings into the plot. Also in some parts its very 'this happened then this happened and then this happened'. By padding out your story with some emotion this will happen less. I like the length of this chapter and the sad look between Lucius and Severus has me very interested! Keep up the writting and the good plot development.
person sanda
schedule April 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good story
schedule March 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I do like where this story was going but it is a little rushed I'd love to see more interaction with the characters. please do update I'd love to read more
person Ecks
schedule February 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I am really liking the story so far and i hope you continue with it
person Kat
schedule January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm enjoying your story very much, thank you. I hope Lucius goes first cos I do agree with Sev's reasoning, but that's just me, I'd be interested in different reasoning too. I can't wait for more.

Hugs

Kat
person pony
schedule November 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
more pretty please. need more. want more. must have more.
person Vittani
schedule November 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
id say sev, harry knows him better. good story by the way, please update.
person dawolfe
schedule October 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like you story can't want to find out how well these three get along together.
UP DATE SOON!!!!
person L'etje
schedule August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
keep going and post soon bye bye
person manx
schedule August 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story, BUT (isn't there always a "but"?) you sort of left out what Lucius is going to do about Narcissa and Draco. Don't you think they should at least be told what's going on? Is he going to divorce her or what? Will this mean he just deserts Draco now? Yes he is his heir but also his son and one USUALLY spends Holidays with their children.