rate_review Reviews

When does dracon come back? and i want to know the rest of the story i like this story it is good and man that tippys he mean

I LIKE THE STORY UPDATE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!

You know- I really debated whether or not I should review or not. I really hemmed and hawed over this. After all, if I don't like something, then I don't have to read it, right? With that being said, I have to tell you that the reason why I am writing this review is to make sure you know that you are giving out the WRONG PERCEPTIONS of the BD/SM lifestyle. Do you even live in the life-style? Do you know that 'punishments' and 'trianing sessions' are not what changes a slave's personal logic? Do you know that it is trust, and faith and the pure level of exchange and commitment between a master and a slave that allows for such deep levels of degragation and ecstacy to exist at the same time?

Yes, this is fan fiction and yes, anyone can write what they want. But your grammar is atrocious. Your plot line is ridiculous. If you had alluded to Hermione having the inclinations to being intrigued by the lifestyle, or fantasizing about submitting and being dominated, then that element would make your story plausible. FIX YOUR SPELLING> FIX YOUR GRAMMAR> DO YOUR HOMEWORK.

PAIN - consenual pain - can be a factor between a master and slave. NON CONSENUAL PAIN IS RAPE. DO you undestand that? If you do, then you must adjust your disclaimers to add rape to the list of items included in your fic... You must also include an AU disclaimer because all of your characters are acting out-of-character.

I really feel bad for the people you are giving a mis-guided view of the BD/SM lifestyle. I have to tell you, because of your perceptions and grammar/spelling errors, I have a hard time believing that you are even of age to be on this site. I think the mods should check your author application.

If you have any thoughts you would like to share with me, please feel free to contact me.

Maevenly

Hi there I am going to be brutally honest with you, this story intrigued me at the start about the first 2 chapters, then this elf thing has just gone on and on and on and it's abit boring and pointless. I think you probably could have done two chapters tops with the house elf and that's about it and get into the meat of the story, maybe you should have put this in the general section rather than Hermione/Draco since there hasn't been any HG/DM yet and it is abit disappointing. Please take this for what it is constructive critisism :)

please write more what is taking so long?

Wasn't impressed with ch 8. It just seemed silly.
The first 2 or 3 chapters were good, now it's just like, stick her in a chair/on a table and whip/poke/fondle her.

There's too much house elf in this story.

Please make your chapters longer!!!!!!!!!! Please update soon.

well i like it and i want to know what will happen next ^_^

Really good, I like the whole BDSM thing, it's not the average HermioneDraco Fic, but the times for the "excercieses" seem HIGHLY unbelievable

Oh I hope you update this soon, I've just read all up to here and can't wait to read more!

*cross fingers for more and Draco soon*

That whole 'I was fixing mistakes' is the same excuse everyone uses. Get a beta reader! It is really strange that your story is always on the top. If you really cared about your work, you would make sure it worth reading before you put it up. It's very annoying to see a story always at the top with no update not to meantion this story has like one chapter of Draco in it and the rest is about a house elf. Either fix this story and make it fit this section and stop bumping it to the top page or I will report it to the mods.