rate_review Reviews

I'm beginning to like this story's flow, but its not been updated! Please, add more chapters soon!

I love your work, and this one looks particularly promising!
I look forward to updates!

Good idea for a story! I definitely like Snape's desire for the Order of Merlin (very much in line with the Prisoner of Azkaban, so good job in keeping with the characters too!) I'm really interested to find out what happens next. When will you update?

Firstly, Thankyou very much for reviewing my story. It seemed only fair for me to review yours. Okay, so here's what I think. I really like the basis of the story. The idea seems original, and not unrealistic for the story. The new character seems good as well. However, I feel like you could work on your sentence structure a little. Occasionally I found myself needing to re-read paragraphs because they didn't make sense the first time around. Also, I feel like the story may have been moving just a little quickly. If you are going to write the story from the perspective of both characters, there could be a little more substance. All and all it shows a lot of promise, and I'm excited to read more. I hope this has been helpful!