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for Spring Heat

by -GazettE_Rocker-

person Megan Consoer
schedule September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
schedule July 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
corrected any errors that i found
great story tho


Draco Malfoy was pissed and boy do I mean pissed.
person Kuronohime
schedule July 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Why would she cry in pain while being clitmassaged? I doubt that it would hurt even if one was to touch it with little force. It's a different story if Draco really tried to rub it _off_ but normally it shouldn't be painful regardless how hard it's being massaged.
schedule July 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey :)

Do you have a beta? If you do not, I would suggest you consider one. You have no paragraphs and there are little mistakes through the writing. Also, since it is not a pwp, consider slowing them down a bit unless this is the entire point of your story. A sex scene doesn