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for A Man Best Forgotten

by emybug3712

person sbrande
schedule January 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Intriguing start, although I do wish you would leave a space in-between paragraphs as it makes it easier to read.

Cheers, Sonia :)
person Anon
schedule August 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Megan Consoer
schedule July 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Anon
schedule July 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
absolutely amazing story, i love it!
person rev
schedule July 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Gads but you're a horrible tease! So when is the next installment (s)? I'm curious to see how this plays out in the Bermuda Triangle of Snape, Potter & Granger.

It IS a good story, you just need to write faster. LOLOL
person septentrion
schedule July 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ch5 : I expected this kind of action but not so soon. You've written it well enough but it didn't sound natural. One moment they don't know how to deal with each other, the next they're snogging like mad.
person Nemesis
schedule June 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More, already! I like what you've written so far.
person septentrion
schedule June 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ch 4 : this story is interesting so far, I'm looking forwart to read more.
person a_reader
schedule June 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have concrit about your story formatting. I'm having a hard time reading your story because of two things: You need to break your text up into shorter paragraphs. Long chunky blocks of text are very difficult to read online. Also, it would be helpful if you inserted breaks between your paragraphs, to make them easier on the eye. I've never posted stories on AFF, but imagine you want to put paragraph tags at the beginning and end of your paragraphs. To find out how to do this, go here: http://www.w3schools.com/tags/tag_p.asp

Good luck!