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person sbkar
schedule June 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Duckie, there are some formatting and grammar/spelling issues that need looking at. Put a space between each paragraph--that will make it easier to read. Won't is the contraction of will not; wont is something else. You've got quite a few problems like that, but, once you polish them up, this will be a great gender-bender.
person KuniChan
schedule June 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love it. I like the part at the Great Hall where Hilary is flushed form ager and turms away and that Draco sees is as a blush. Keep it up.
person RentaiKitten
schedule June 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great start! Can't wait to read more.
person Amessis
schedule June 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this!