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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This. is. bloody. BRILLIANT.
You've done an amazing job of coming up with a well thought out, coherent, and realistic plot. The characters stay true to themselves and the changes they're going through make sense. I'm really impressed. I love it when I find a well-written story to read - so much out there is mindless drabble, it seems. *sigh*
This is a brilliant bit of work - well done, and keep writing! You've got a gift for it!
-K.M. :D
You've done an amazing job of coming up with a well thought out, coherent, and realistic plot. The characters stay true to themselves and the changes they're going through make sense. I'm really impressed. I love it when I find a well-written story to read - so much out there is mindless drabble, it seems. *sigh*
This is a brilliant bit of work - well done, and keep writing! You've got a gift for it!
-K.M. :D
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September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
darn short chapters... grr.. um you titled chap 27 26 btw... lookin foreward to more.
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September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice job! I enjoyed the update and am anxiously awaiting your next one. I offer incentive and encouragement always, so if you need it just peek at your reviews. Untill next time...........
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September 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ARRRGGH!!! i sign onto adultfanfiction eager to see if a new chapter has been added... YES, number 27 is up!!! i open it only to find another one of those short 200 or so word chapters...
i understand they have a purpose & you're going somewhere with them, but... well, they're just such a tease!!! Is it possible you could add them at the start of full chapters? or only post one when you have another full chapter to post after them?
i understand they have a purpose & you're going somewhere with them, but... well, they're just such a tease!!! Is it possible you could add them at the start of full chapters? or only post one when you have another full chapter to post after them?
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September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Aww, shucks. I hate this little chapters, even if you say they aren't pointless. :(
I think it would look better (and make us feel better too, lol, XP) if you just included them at the top of the longer, actual story chapters...
I think it would look better (and make us feel better too, lol, XP) if you just included them at the top of the longer, actual story chapters...
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September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Eeeee! So cute! ^.^ Seriously though, I'm spotting a few typos still, but mistakes happen. I'm loving the way you describe things so well though, and the storyline is marvelous! I can't wait to read more.
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September 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh yeah! Oh yeah! I absolutely love chapter 26! Things are beginning to happen and I can't wait to see what's going to happen next. A strong Thank You for this wonderful story, and keep writing more!
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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YAY
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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow im loving this fic! the thing i love most is how your working on a relationship between the guys instead of just throwing them in as a loving couple who hated each other an hour ago. Can't wait for more!!
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September 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Plot, plot, and oh yes more plot. Gotta love it. Sex is great, but sometimes people are in such a hurry to get the boys in bed that character development gets let by the wayside. I am really glad you are taking your time.