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June 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay. This isn't a flame... but you are writing is past and present tense at the same time throught the whole fic. My best advice is pick one or the other... because this just doesn't work. Also I would advise on getting a Beta Reader if you don't already have one.
I like the fic overall, but it would be better if you would use only one tense...
Also feel free to email me if you want...
Later Dayz,
Tjay Motou
I like the fic overall, but it would be better if you would use only one tense...
Also feel free to email me if you want...
Later Dayz,
Tjay Motou
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June 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
why did you have to kill him?
i'm crying my eyes out!
i love this story, its BRILLIANT!
looking forward to much more of your work!
this story is just AMAZING!
love t
i'm crying my eyes out!
i love this story, its BRILLIANT!
looking forward to much more of your work!
this story is just AMAZING!
love t
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June 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW!! That was great...sad but great!
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June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
love it it was so sad it made me cry so so so sad
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June 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you did an absolutly great job on this!!... i had tears in my eyes by the end, it was breaking my heart... so bittersweet... so beautiful... you write really great d/hr fic.. i can\'t believe this is only your second.
keep up the great work!!
keep up the great work!!
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June 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Omg, you made my eyes tear up. I\'m so angry with you. Loved the story!
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June 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was absolutly beautiful. I loved it and damn it...you made me cry!
Great fic!
Great fic!
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June 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
\'She wants to tell him he matters.\'
Ah, gets me everytime I read it.
Great writing. :D
Ah, gets me everytime I read it.
Great writing. :D