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interesting :)

You can't end it like this >(! I love it soo much!
I can't wait to read what happens next! And I'm sorry
your animals died. I know how how that feels.

Oh yeah! I forgot to ask. Is there going to be a pairing soon in the future of the story?
I can't wait to see who you're going to pair Harry with. I'd personally like for it to be
either Draco or Blaise. Maybe Blaise. I've never read a Harry/Blaise fic before. What will
it be oh Talented One. ^-^

Oooh, I loved it! It's so interesting, and I'm only on ch. 1.

Will Aurel and Nic have a relationship? Because I think they'd be perfect for each other. And as for Aurel's stance... I think he should stay neutral for the most part. Away from Dumble's manipulations

Breathlessly I read all the chapters in one go.
Yopu have a wonderful way of making the passing of time flow
into each other seemlessly.
I can't wait to find out what will happen next.
By the way...the are some spelling mistakes in the last two chapters, but nothing big.

Can't wait for chapter 14, please update soon. ^_^

good chapter.

This is written in a way that is easy to follow, but it is also a bit emotionless. Its like a recipe being read, not people's feelings and thoughts. Perhaps you could try to make it a bit more personal? You could do this in many ways, but the easiest is to have one character's POV, so they would talk in the first person. This would also give you the opportunity to express themselves. You could also reconstruct your sentences to make them more envolved. This is an excellent and very enjoyable story, but it is lacking in a certain 'fire', or 'drive' that pulls the reader in. Harry also seems very OOC, but that can be overlooked when you see the high standards of the rest if the story. I was a little bit disapointed to see you went with the whole chliche 'mating season' or 'going into heat' thing, that you see a lot of. I was hoping a proper relationship was going to develop. I hate impersonal sex, it just isn't interesting. Anyway, I hope this doesn't come off the wrong way (cause I'm not being mean, honest! ^_^) and that you find this helpful in some way!

I love your story, but I do feel the need to be a bit of a harsh critic. It just.. it seemed you got lazy with your work, skipping all of those years and giving up only a few details, leaving us to wounder wtf is going on otherwise. I do suggest you rethink your decision and at least skip over those few years you blatantly passed over. I know I'm not the only one who would appreciate not being gypped of a good story.